Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

[JAYRMe]

Take Me UP


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A little somethin' I recorded not finished still finding the perfect singer for the hook so I can send this into the radio stations, listen and gimme some feedback so I know what to change. Appreciate it.

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[Cli-City]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

"like a tumor all up in my head...I dont even mind"...WTF?????? is that what you meant to say.....

Other than that the beat is ready for the radio...but you gotta work on your presence on the mic a bit....if you get an epic hook...this might be radio ready....

Flow 3/5......
Lyrics 3/5

Overall 3/5 Honestly I found myself bopping my head to this but only for the beat....I had to rewind a few times to listen to the lyrics......

I would say that for your first radio song..improve it lyrically so people would know that you can really rap and not just standing behind some electro-pop beat....

[lilchukieforeheadbig]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

yo what the fuck man, this beat so hot. that bird crow melody synth thing is so hot. who the fuck made this beat?
you need to get marka from soundclick on the hook, and you got a radio joint bro. you dont need to be extra dope nowadays, just a hot hook and beat, and able to flow on beat. lulz.
post more shit if it sounds hot like this. with a beat like this, it give us no choice but to keep listenin.
i dont even remember any of the words, but i like this. lmao.

[JAYRMe]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

"like a tumor all up in my head...I dont even mind"...WTF?????? is that what you meant to say.....

Other than that the beat is ready for the radio...but you gotta work on your presence on the mic a bit....if you get an epic hook...this might be radio ready....

Flow 3/5......
Lyrics 3/5

Overall 3/5 Honestly I found myself bopping my head to this but only for the beat....I had to rewind a few times to listen to the lyrics......

I would say that for your first radio song..improve it lyrically so people would know that you can really rap and not just standing behind some electro-pop beat....

The tumor line suppose to be a metaphor for she's stuck inside my head. As for the mic presence yeah i been trying to work on that but I honestly think its the mic I record on because I recorded on another mic and my presence was good but I'll try to improve the lyrics a bit.

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

How much you want for the beat bro???

also i expected your quality to be pro after seeing your comments about mykills quality being muddy, and you mentioned mine could be better.
but you sound like you using a usb mic like the rest of us
your vocals and beat sound too low imo.

take a listen to mine again.........

Quality could be a lot better.....

^^^^^^^^^ can you elaborate???

[JAYRMe]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

How much you want for the beat bro???

also i expected your quality to be pro after seeing your comments about mykills quality being muddy, and you mentioned mine could be better.
but you sound like you using a usb mic like the rest of us
your vocals and beat sound too low imo.

take a listen to mine again.........



^^^^^^^^^ can you elaborate???

Im using a rode ntk tube phanton powered mic running pro tools 8 LE on a mbox 3rd gen so no sir lol this is isn't even mixed down at all so the quality is no where near it's potential but yeah.
I see you caught feelings when I said your quality could be better ill go back to your thread and give you more detailed feedback bro, no hard feelings idk why u tried to come at me like that though.

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

Im using a rode ntk tube phanton powered mic running pro tools 8 LE on a mbox 3rd gen so no sir lol this is isn't even mixed down at all so the quality is no where near it's potential but yeah.
I see you caught feelings when I said your quality could be better ill go back to your thread and give you more detailed feedback bro, no hard feelings idk why u tried to come at me like that though.

nah bro i didnt catch feelings, i just wanted to know specifically what could be improved, becuz the quality sounded good to me, and nobody else mentioned anything.
also i would be interested in hearing a final mixdown/mastered song of yours please, becuz i seriously thought u was using usb mics like the rest of us.
are you using a good preamp with your xlr mic???

[JAYRMe]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

nah bro i didnt catch feelings, i just wanted to know specifically what could be improved, becuz the quality sounded good to me, and nobody else mentioned anything.
also i would be interested in hearing a final mixdown/mastered song of yours please, becuz i seriously thought u was using usb mics like the rest of us.
are you using a good preamp with your xlr mic???

No thats next on the upgrade list for me and my team but the built in the preamp on the mbox is good for now so were not really rushing.

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

No thats next on the upgrade list for me and my team but the built in the preamp on the mbox is good for now so were not really rushing.

you got any fully mixed examples i can hear???

[JAYRMe]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

you got any fully mixed examples i can hear???

Here you go

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

Here you go

this a 500 dollar mic???

[JAYRMe]

Re: Jayrme- Take Me Up (Unfinished)

this a 500 dollar mic???

You don't think that's good quality?