Verse I wrote.. my best but still not good hah.

[ThaWeezy]

Soo I was bored, I had not written for a long ass time and I felt a bit of inspiration so I wrote this verse took me like an hour and a half or so. Background story real quick: These past few years have been quite hard for me, and this verse goes into it a bit.

Im sick of hearing people bitch when they have it all
Weaklings rolling a couple snowflakes into a snowball
I went through a lot of shit but I shoveled it all
Took me a while but I sprung right back up after the fall
I never thought the valleys of hell could be so cold
It's true thatonly the lord knows what the future holds
Following my guilty conscience was like the blind leading the blind
Looking back at the things I almost did I mustve been out of my mind




Everybody's welcome in my kitchen I'm serving the competition
All I want is respect, I don't care about recognition
Heavy words, by myself outweighing the opposition
One standing strong, smashing through the coalition
Your shtick is getting old, bodies in decomposition
And when I talk shit I make it sound good like a politician
World war 3 is coming and I'm dropping bombshells
Confusing metaphors that will make your mind melt
Don't worry haters I see you vibing to my rhymes
And while you stay on the ground, to the top I climb
After all this struggle I am definitely back on my grind
The new Shawn is here i left the old one to die behind




Note: The fourth line is a somewhat interesting wordplay I came up with. Well for me it is interesting.
I sprung back up (spring the season, getting back on my feet) after the fall (the season, falling emotionally, hitting rock bottom).. and I precise "it took me a while but.." while = winter, aka the season between fall and spring. The lines above about the snowfall, and the lines about shoveling shit as well as the line saying hell is cold all sorta tie in together to this wordplay. Be honest don't be afraid to hurt my feelings; I know it isn't good.

[dooom777]

I reAlly liked it bro
Make a song of this
It is really good
Or can I use this and make a song

If you want to I ain't forcing you tho
Can I?

[ajlfc92]

If this verse was written to tell your story and portray the emotions you have felt over the period you are talking about then only one person can rap this verse and it's you. You know how those times made you feel so portray it in your delivery so the words are expressed in the way that you wanted them to be when you wrote them.

[Diana.]

It's very good, 4 real !!!! go record it

[Vocker]

Nice lines, really cool lyrics.