Rembrandt - In My Zone

[ATLien666]

This is a song I just did for fun, it might be a bonus on the mixtape or something. Out of context it's weird, but I'll update this when I post the video and then it'll make sense. Yeah. I'm basically rapping out video games and shit, idk, man. It's all outta fun, I'mma put this DVR to use and use that gameplay for the video. Fuck it, Monster coming soon. Also, this is the third chorus/hook I've written!

But anyways:
In My Zone.mp3 - Hulk Share - Music Distribution Platform

Verse 1:
Hello Nintendo, you really just pissin' me off with the Lost Levels/
I mean, I'm really just tryna beat the shit/
Look at this man, don't this lookin' like cheatin' shit?/
But go ahead and tell the goombas that their ain't a stain on me/
Feelin' pretty good 'cause Princess Peach got saved, homie/
Well fuck... fuck/
Well, that hurt my morale, so I had to switch it up/
Show these dudes even Voldo couldn't kick with us/
The rumor is: I'm the best and it might be true/
I ain't denyin' it, but hey, what can you do?/
and I think I like this more than Resident Evil, too/
So okay, now do you follow?/
Come up out that Darkness, like Jackie Estacado/
Unless you're good there like he is/
Goin' crazy talkin' to your demons/
And they don't wanna see me, knockin' niggas out in UFC 3/
and hey, it's a lazy day, but I ain't complainin'/
I got my video games and I'm just sayin'/

Hook (2x):
I don't feel like doin' shit, so that's what I'mma do/
Got me all up in my zone, it's gonna be hard for me to lose/
Tell them boys to get a clue. Tell them boys to get a clue/
Got me all up in my zone, it's gonna be hard for me to lose/

Verse 2:
Like, when school ain't on my mind/
I spend my free time gettin' high/
Lookin' at the sky in Skyrim/
'Til I have to remind 'em that I ain't nobody to fuck with/
Go 0-8 and then I just change the subject/
Before I start borin' 'em, change the story and play Rayman Origins/
Listen to what I'm sayin', you really just needa buy the game and thank a nigga later/
This is a reminder, to remind 'em that I do this/
Bumpin' Robb Bank$ while playin' Civ Revolution/
Got a nigga actin' stupid, but no pressure, I won't lose this/
Got Ghandi ass hatin' me; Rome ain't on no fake shit, you see?/
Quit the shit, play some Max Payne 3/
Good things all about that. The question is, man/
Where the fuck is Mona Sax?/
Max is in Brazil, still, she'll be dead on arrival/
the bullet time is workin' out/
this shit is bananas with no doubt 'cause/

Hook (2x)

Bridge:
Some shit I can't remember 'cause I ain't type it, but nigga aye.

Hook (2x)

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[mykill]

Good Sir, this is actually one crafty track you have here. I like how you weave all the video game references into it. Chorus is bumpin' too. You did a good job on here, but is this an old track? I can hear some inklings of that old flow creeping around on this one. Solid performance though.

Overall: 4.1/5

[ATLien666]

Good Sir, this is actually one crafty track you have here. I like how you weave all the video game references into it. Chorus is bumpin' too. You did a good job on here, but is this an old track? I can hear some inklings of that old flow creeping around on this one. Solid performance though.

Overall: 4.1/5

Why, thank you. But nah, I just finished like an hour ago, lol. I noticed it, too. It came from being frustrated with doing the song. I didn't really feel like fixing some of the mistakes. right on, though!

[mykill]

i feel ya. i do that shit all the time lol.

[MC_Crary]

I know what you mean about that frustration man. The flow slips arent as bad as they use to be though.

Nice on the game refrences though. Hook is a little loud, throws off the flow of the mixing. Nice fun track though man. Glad you're back. Missed your lyrical mastery.

[ATLien666]

I know what you mean about that frustration man. The flow slips arent as bad as they use to be though.

Nice on the game refrences though. Hook is a little loud, throws off the flow of the mixing. Nice fun track though man. Glad you're back. Missed your lyrical mastery.

Right on, I went back and lowered the hook. I appreciate it, I'mma be dropping new new songs a lot more, too.

[lilweezyfan]

Is this song about a nintendo??

[mrstraightfire]

First time listening to your music. I really like the beat, did you produce it as well?

The content is very original and funny, I play video games a lot as well. I think you got a good flow, but from time to time occasionally you were offbeat.

Overall it's a good song, the hook was cool as well. You kinda remind me of Big Sean.

[DMC927]

8.5/10

Liked it, nice beat, steady flow, but you could step up the lyrical content a bit.


Princess Peach

[ATLien666]

First time listening to your music. I really like the beat, did you produce it as well?

The content is very original and funny, I play video games a lot as well. I think you got a good flow, but from time to time occasionally you were offbeat.

Overall it's a good song, the hook was cool as well. You kinda remind me of Big Sean.

nah, I wish, though.

Everybody tells me the Big Sean thing, lol. Thanks!

8.5/10

Liked it, nice beat, steady flow, but you could step up the lyrical content a bit.


Princess Peach

Ah man, I was tryin'. lol, I almost rewrote the thing 3 times. Song was buggin' the fuck outta me. Thanks, though!