Poyo - Mary & Molly

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

Poyo - MaryMolly.mp3

Some slight shit, hope you like


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[Cli-City]

This shit right here nigga....gawd damn....the concept is well executed....

Remix this shit.....and since I see niggas flooding the studio..get them same niggas to flood this bitch...This one deserves that remix treatment

Poyo - Mary & Molly Remix ft. MC_Crary, Mykill, Noble, Yung Diezel and Artille....


Get that one done A$AP before June is out..

[Flame Gang]

track is aight.. the chorus is annoying tho. The concept was tight tho

[akkucc]

I like the verses, chorus is okay just different, overall this song is cool, just different funny song. So, i will go with 3.8/5 for this song.

good luck!!

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

This shit right here nigga....gawd damn....the concept is well executed....

Remix this shit.....and since I see niggas flooding the studio..get them same niggas to flood this bitch...This one deserves that remix treatment

Poyo - Mary & Molly Remix ft. MC_Crary, Mykill, Noble, Yung Diezel and Artille....


Get that one done A$AP before June is out..

Word, ima pm a few about a remix


btw, that opening sounds awkward lol, i got a pretty cool sample to play before i start the chorus for when i upload it to youtube

[ATLien666]

Ah shit, you should use that part from mercy when Kanye is like, "Something 'bout Mary, she's gone off that Molly." Find it chopped and screwed or something.

Flow - 3.8/5: Kinda boring. You should've switched it up more or something. I don't know what it was. I know you was going for a laidback flow, but you were kinda too hype for it. It was like a mixture of it, idk, it just sounded kinda weird.

Lyrics - 3.5/5: Wasn't expecting amazing lyricism, but I felt like you could've added in some dope punchlines or something. especially with this kinda concept. I was expecting you to talk about how you were fuckin' with mary and molly at the same time, call that a menage a trois or some shit, lol.

Other: I didn't really like the chorus, it just seemed like it wasn't all the way there. Find some way to flesh it out a little more. I did like the concept, though. I like the list Cli has, that would make for a dope remix. I was confused on the song structure. I know it was: chorus/verse/chorus, but the verses weren't 12/16, were they? They just seemed really short, it was like the whole song was a chorus.

Overall: 3.5/5: Not a bad song, it was just okay. I feel like if you flesh it out a little more, switch up the flow or perfect it and add one or more guest artists, it'll be a banger.

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

Ah shit, you should use that part from mercy when Kanye is like, "Something 'bout Mary, she's gone off that Molly." Find it chopped and screwed or something.

Flow - 3.8/5: Kinda boring. You should've switched it up more or something. I don't know what it was. I know you was going for a laidback flow, but you were kinda too hype for it. It was like a mixture of it, idk, it just sounded kinda weird.

Lyrics - 3.5/5: Wasn't expecting amazing lyricism, but I felt like you could've added in some dope punchlines or something. especially with this kinda concept. I was expecting you to talk about how you were fuckin' with mary and molly at the same time, call that a menage a trois or some shit, lol.

Other: I didn't really like the chorus, it just seemed like it wasn't all the way there. Find some way to flesh it out a little more. I did like the concept, though. I like the list Cli has, that would make for a dope remix. I was confused on the song structure. I know it was: chorus/verse/chorus, but the verses weren't 12/16, were they? They just seemed really short, it was like the whole song was a chorus.

Overall: 3.5/5: Not a bad song, it was just okay. I feel like if you flesh it out a little more, switch up the flow or perfect it and add one or more guest artists, it'll be a banger.

Lol true shit but i aint never fucked with both at the same time though tbh but i feel what you saying though, thanks for keeping it 3hunna


also what you think i could do to flesh out the chorus?

[ATLien666]

Lol true shit but i aint never fucked with both at the same time though tbh but i feel what you saying though, thanks for keeping it 3hunna


also what you think i could do to flesh out the chorus?

Ah yeah, I feel you. Could've lied, though.

I don't really know, though. You could try some adlibs or throw in a couple more lines, it's really up to you. You might be able to flesh it out when you do the remix by having the other rappers do adlibs in there. You know, kinda like how that nigga from Travis Porter says "Preach" in Amen.

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

Ah yeah, I feel you. Could've lied, though.

I don't really know, though. You could try some adlibs or throw in a couple more lines, it's really up to you. You might be able to flesh it out when you do the remix by having the other rappers do adlibs in there. You know, kinda like how that nigga from Travis Porter says "Preach" in Amen.

i did have adlibs in there though maybe i need to turn them up?

and i thought that was drake that said preach? lol

[TupacShaquer]

Ehhh , the beginning <<<<
To repetitive . lol

This song was decent , your usual Poyo. I'm still waiting for another "Not So Good" which you said you had one or some shit.
Lyrics were pretty simple , thought you could have went harder, maybe some more clever punchlines. Flow was decent heard a slip up which is rare from you. I honestly, didn't like this song .
Overall , 2/5 , had to be harsh on you if you want to get better and better on your songs which I've seen until now.

[lilchukieforeheadbig]

Ehhh , the beginning <<<<
To repetitive . lol

This song was decent , your usual Poyo. I'm still waiting for another "Not So Good" which you said you had one or some shit.
Lyrics were pretty simple , thought you could have went harder, maybe some more clever punchlines. Flow was decent heard a slip up which is rare from you. I honestly, didn't like this song .
Overall , 2/5 , had to be harsh on you if you want to get better and better on your songs which I've seen until now.

^^^^^
AND THAT IS WHAT I LIKE TO CALL REAL NIGGA FEEBACK

cant believe ole' fuckboy had it in him.

Who would've ever known a fuckboy could have realnigga blood in him?
he graduated from fuckboy to realnigga

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

Ehhh , the beginning <<<<
To repetitive . lol

This song was decent , your usual Poyo. I'm still waiting for another "Not So Good" which you said you had one or some shit.
Lyrics were pretty simple , thought you could have went harder, maybe some more clever punchlines. Flow was decent heard a slip up which is rare from you. I honestly, didn't like this song .
Overall , 2/5 , had to be harsh on you if you want to get better and better on your songs which I've seen until now.

yeah, im changing the begining definitely, i already found the sample im using. thanks on the feed , i guess this song is not for everybody tho, this is my favorite song ive done tbh lol. and that "not so good" track is coming eventually i just need to finish the last verse but thats not the type of vibe im going for. im just making music to kick it to

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^^^^^
AND THAT IS WHAT I LIKE TO CALL REAL NIGGA FEEBACK

cant believe ole' fuckboy had it in him.

Who would've ever known a fuckboy could have realnigga blood in him?
he graduated from fuckboy to realnigga

Lmaooo swag swag!!

but im guessing you dont like this either then? you dont fuck with any of my new songs lol