Rembrandt - God Bless America

[ATLien666]

So, I wrote this and some other song produced one of the studio's very own last night. I had that World Needs Change track on MONSTER, but that was lol, so I'm replacing it with this. This will probably be intro or the song right after the intro. Youth.In.Revolt. MONSTER coming soon.

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Lyrics:

(Verse 1)
Don't worry white America, no need to fear a nigga/Don't worry fox news, I ain't gon' kill a nigga/
Tell 'em that it's all good, yeah, man, it's all good/
I won't do no harm, but I'll wear my hood all through ya'll hood/
Making sure it's all right 'cause they hood is all white/
and they might catch the plea if they shoot up this dark knight/
Until it bleeds sunlight/
And I won't even fight/
they'll still be a side that looks at me as the bad guy/

(Chorus)
Welcome to the land that dreams are really made of/
God bless America/
I hope we never wake up/
Welcome to the land where dreams are really made up/
God bless America/
And everything it's made of/

(Verse 2)
Nothing like that drug money/
Nothing like that fast money/
Nothing like that never ever last money, nigga/
And it runs all through the family/
We all have our vices, yours just happens to be gambling/
But bills needa be paid/
Watching scarface thinking you wanna be tony before the jig's up/
Only thing ya'll got in common is where ya'll nigga's both end up/
All you had was good intentions and you hope your family knows this/
And they do, saying their goodbyes before the casket finally closes/

(Chorus)
Welcome to the land that dreams are really made of/God bless America/
I hope we never wake up/
Welcome to the land where dreams are really made up/
God bless America/
And everything it's made of/


(Verse 3)
Welcome to the land that dreams are really made of/
Welcome to the land where dreams are really made up/
Pick your side, it's live or die/
Hurry and make your mind up/
Keep thinkin' this a game until your time's up. Time's up/
nd I could have it all and aye/
I'll still be a nigger, they just won't say it to my face/
But I never swallowed my pride, couldn't tell you how it taste/
But that's okay/
God Bless America, don't you ever change/

(Chorus)
Welcome to the land that dreams are really made of/God bless America/
I hope we never wake up/
Welcome to the land where dreams are really made up/
God bless America/
And everything it's made of/

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[ATLien666]

Why are the views all fucked up?

[mykill]

Why are the views all fucked up?

No idea why that happens.... weird....

[TupacShaquer]

I liked it , love the type of shit you write

[ATLien666]

I liked it , love the type of shit you write

Right on, glad you enjoyed it!

[ATLien666]

Quick bump.

[Gibbsy]

dope shit homie!!! sick like the intro , the beat is osmething ide definalty spit on so beat choice was perfect, the subject fits over it to but ide of gone a diff direction only thing that i etn keen on is the hook sounds alot like the verses, but the flo is nice and the lyrics

4.5/5 man

have to collab on something like this

[ATLien666]

dope shit homie!!! sick like the intro , the beat is osmething ide definalty spit on so beat choice was perfect, the subject fits over it to but ide of gone a diff direction only thing that i etn keen on is the hook sounds alot like the verses, but the flo is nice and the lyrics

4.5/5 man

have to collab on something like this

Right on, bro and yeah, I'm still trying to get the hang of choruses and shit. But I'm down for a collab like this whenever.

[mykill]

Lyrically, this was above the cut. I think the hook was pretty good. The verses were pretty good.

Production wise, this beat was a great choice.

Technically, The vocals were too high, but they were crisp and clear. The effects you used were pretty good. Also remember to cut out those parts at the end when you're rambling around your set up in your room lol.

I think you did a great job with this concept. The vocals were a bit too loud here and there, so double check your levels before you compile the track. You're really coming out into your own lately. Even if this is just a lame forum on a lil wayne fan site, you definitely have made your mark around here. Good job Remy

Overall: 4/5

[ATLien666]

Lyrically, this was above the cut. I think the hook was pretty good. The verses were pretty good.

Production wise, this beat was a great choice.

Technically, The vocals were too high, but they were crisp and clear. The effects you used were pretty good. Also remember to cut out those parts at the end when you're rambling around your set up in your room lol.

I think you did a great job with this concept. The vocals were a bit too loud here and there, so double check your levels before you compile the track. You're really coming out into your own lately. Even if this is just a lame forum on a lil wayne fan site, you definitely have made your mark around here. Good job Remy

Overall: 4/5

Right on! Yeah, this beat was really fucking me over when it came to be leveled, one moment it was normal, next it was loud as fuck, lol. But thanks, that truly means a lot.