Rembrandt - Twilight Zone (Everything I Wished For)

[IN10SION]

Rembrandt asked me to upload his new song called 'Twilight Zone (Everything I Wished For)' produced by me, cuz of his lack of internet at the moment.

I think he did a great job on this one, what do you think ? Give my Homie some Feedback, he gonna read it as soon as he's back on the internet!

here it is:

Listen to Twilight Zone (Everything I Wished For) (prod. by IN10SIVE beats) on Hulkshare - Free Music Streaming & Download




Feedback:
1: http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tok-verse.html
2: http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post928736

[ATLien666]

5/5 for production only.

[Tha Professor]

dope beat, dope hook, dope verse.
4/5

[IN10SION]

Thanks man, im really feelin this song

[danielnfl36]

5/5 for production only.

love this!

5/5 all around dat beat! amazing flow

[mykill]

see why can't you use kicks and bass like this on your other beats? Kicks sound great on this. melody is pretty good too. 3.9/5

as for the song, another consistent Remy track. there's too much reverb on your verse, but for the name of the track and the beat, it works. You definitely need to do something to differentiate the hook from the verses. Didnt know you were doing the hook till you got the middle of it and I was like "oh that was the same lines from before". Try a screwed down (pitched down) voice. Might make it sound spacey and a pitched up voice here and there for adlibs on the exclamations on the hook. coulda left the sound bite out

Overall: 3.8/5

[ATLien666]

see why can't you use kicks and bass like this on your other beats? Kicks sound great on this. melody is pretty good too. 3.9/5

as for the song, another consistent Remy track. there's too much reverb on your verse, but for the name of the track and the beat, it works. You definitely need to do something to differentiate the hook from the verses. Didnt know you were doing the hook till you got the middle of it and I was like "oh that was the same lines from before". Try a screwed down (pitched down) voice. Might make it sound spacey and a pitched up voice here and there for adlibs on the exclamations on the hook. coulda left the sound bite out

Overall: 3.8/5

Right on and I'mma really start working on the choruses, I noticed the same thing. I been messing with different effects, but I'mma really take the time to fuck with shit and try to differentiate.

[MC_Crary]

Destiny line lol. Sick. Great way to open. The lines for the hook were dope. Fuckin girls in Japan that don't even speak Japanese. Something I noticed on this track is though you are a great and poetic lyricist, you still interlope dope stand out lines into your verses. That's a necessary factor in my opinion to make it. Things to work on still are your flow and mastering. On this sometimes you still rush the flow. It's improved immensely but you gotta keep it consistent homie. The mastering needs tweaking as far as balancing the volume of your adlibs and the reverb could be a tad high. Effects on the hook need work too. I think that's one of my biggest problems too, so I'd have a hard time giving advice on that. Guys like Mykill and Noble are good at it though. IN10SION dropped some heat with this beat though. Great track guys.

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

5/5 for production only.

i thought i was sposed to hop on this

[JSmooth]

flow- 3.5/5 i actually enjoyed it but it got too repetitive imo
lyrics- 4.2/5 i was feelin the lyrics thats where u shined and usually do
overall- 4/5 solid track and HOT beat good work from both of yall

[IN10SION]

Thanks guys really apreciate all the feedback!! This is the second beat i made (besides some tryings) im glad you like it that much!

[Sentus]

Beat is great good verse on that.

Here's a tip for Rembrandt, try not to sound exactly like Big Sean. No one wants to listen to a copycat. You have a good voice, the potential for a good flow and some good quality so you have a chance at getting bigger but first you need to develop your own style.