Mo' Rich-Just Livin' (Prod. by Cardiak)

[waynefan24]

Feedback 1: http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post954605
Feedback 2: http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post954633

Off new upcoming mixtape 'Comeback Season'
(Original beat is Lloyd Banks' 'Live It Up' off his V6 mixtape.)

http://www.hulkshare.com/un8abfrke0w0

[DeezyMac]

yo you forreal sound like a typical DMV nigga lol. heard your voice, then looked at your location and was like "yup, thought so".

Lyrics and flow nice. the vocals don't seem mixed all the way and they're mad loud. other than that, this song goesss. i think you should do something to the chorus though to make it stand out from the verse, like double it up. other than that, keep it up.

Edit - Whatever you did to mix the "and it's comeback season" part at the very end, use that on the verse. because those 4 words alone are better mixed.

[waynefan24]

yo you forreal sound like a typical DMV nigga lol. heard your voice, then looked at your location and was like "yup, thought so".

Lyrics and flow nice. the vocals don't seem mixed all the way and they're mad loud. other than that, this song goesss. i think you should do something to the chorus though to make it stand out from the verse, like double it up. other than that, keep it up.

Edit - Whatever you did to mix the "and it's comeback season" part at the very end, use that on the verse. because those 4 words alone are better mixed.

Yea should be hittin the studio this week, that was on garageband on my macbook.

[mykill]

EDIT: Can a mod change "Pord." to "Prod." thanks in advance.

Done and done.

Your flow reminds me of mine. Sometimes its great, sometimes its kinda robotic. Rhymes are elementary. Mixing is bad, but there's some room for improvement. There are some decent punches though and the beat is fitting. Make sure you mix the chorus/hook differently (some doubling, some stereoizing, etc) so that it doesnt sound like another verse. You gotta catch the listener's ear without changing things up to much. Just enough to differentiate.

Work on the lyrics: more wordplay, multis, and more creative punches that we havent already heard 1000 variations of. Turn up your vocals a little bit next time. I like this. Nice work.

Overall: 3.4/5

[pgathriller]

the recording quality needs some serious work -- that's the main thing holding you back

for trap, it sounds pretty nice; I like the rhythm in your flow
(yikes, just heard the line "to be successful, you gotta have a plan; know what you want outta life hope ya understand" and it was real sloppy + that line is kinda cheesy)

the kick is knocking nice but that was really the only thing in the beat that I was impressed with tbh

upgrade that recording equipment should be first on your list whilst writing some more interesting lyrics imo