Rembrandt - Graduation/Untitled snippet

[ATLien666]

I wanted to post more songs off Monster, but then there would be no point in downloading the mixtape. I record songs and always want to put them out, lol, but I took two songs I'm working on and only left in the first verse. but yeah, Youth in Revolt. Monster coming soon. Shoutout to them hentai hoes that wind me down, though.

Feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...ntitled-2.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...orruption.html

---------- Post added at 11:12 PM ---------- Previous post was at 06:14 PM ----------

goddamn, this got pushed quickly.

[Cli-City]

Man you should've hit me..a sick melody jumped in my head when I heard this instrumental...I like your hook though..very catchy..I actually downloaded this one just for the hook...

I honestly see your grind brother and that shit shows.....you're improving by leaps and bounds....you seem a lot more comfortable on the mic...if you were stronger lyrically this would be an A$AP Rocky type of shit....flow was sick....I like how you switched it up in and out of verses....Dope song...

---------- Post added at 07:17 PM ---------- Previous post was at 07:16 PM ----------

That untilted shit came in and I started laughing hard as fuck..What was that....

Man you remind me so much of A$AP Rocky but you need to improve lyrically.....

[YUNG DIEZEL]

i dont hear asap rocky at all, but thats prolly cuz i dont listen to much asap rocky lol. is asap really that lyrical??
i thought the lyrics here were fine though. im still hearing big sean, but now wit a hint of kanye, lol.
u did one of kanye rap vocal gestures(i dont know what to call it) u did it in both songs here,
and i never heard you do it any any other songs, but its not a bad thing lol.
dunno if you fuck wit ye, but kanye + big sean = good music, so u should keep it up.

[TheRealMH]

did you name yourself rembrandt just so people would say they like your art?

[mykill]

im still hearing big sean, but now wit a hint of kanye, lol. u did one of kanye rap vocal gestures(i dont know what to call it)

Agreed.

This beat is kinda cold...

Needs a Mykill feature....

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

dont see any of the comparisons i think you sound like rembrandt.... but once again you ripped it, i remember you was like you werent that good at choruses you got over that pretty quick, but that untitled is my shit, just an awesome vibe and a very based sample at the end

[ATLien666]

Man you should've hit me..a sick melody jumped in my head when I heard this instrumental...I like your hook though..very catchy..I actually downloaded this one just for the hook...

I honestly see your grind brother and that shit shows.....you're improving by leaps and bounds....you seem a lot more comfortable on the mic...if you were stronger lyrically this would be an A$AP Rocky type of shit....flow was sick....I like how you switched it up in and out of verses....Dope song...

---------- Post added at 07:17 PM ---------- Previous post was at 07:16 PM ----------

That untilted shit came in and I started laughing hard as fuck..What was that....

Man you remind me so much of A$AP Rocky but you need to improve lyrically.....

This is the first time i've ever been compared to rocky and I do not see the connections at all. Especially since rocky is far from lyrical, so idk if you're saying I'm garbage lyrically or what.

i dont hear asap rocky at all, but thats prolly cuz i dont listen to much asap rocky lol. is asap really that lyrical??
i thought the lyrics here were fine though. im still hearing big sean, but now wit a hint of kanye, lol.
u did one of kanye rap vocal gestures(i dont know what to call it) u did it in both songs here,
and i never heard you do it any any other songs, but its not a bad thing lol.
dunno if you fuck wit ye, but kanye + big sean = good music, so u should keep it up.

Oh yeah, kanye's like my favorite rapper, I will admit I bit that shit hard. It's just fun to say, lmao. I still don't hear the big sean thing besides for certain enunciation which just comes naturally.

did you name yourself rembrandt just so people would say they like your art?

Lmao, nah, but I'll run with it.

Agreed.

This beat is kinda cold...

Needs a Mykill feature....

Got you.

dont see any of the comparisons i think you sound like rembrandt.... but once again you ripped it, i remember you was like you werent that good at choruses you got over that pretty quick, but that untitled is my shit, just an awesome vibe and a very based sample at the end

Right on, my nigga. I'm glad, I think I'm still eh on choruses, but it's good to know I ain't terrible at em. And hell yeah, that's just me replacing that other untitled shit I had on here, lol, but that end part is my shit just for now, now.

[IN10SION]

I loved the first song.. Awesome beat and you just killed it, second one is more something to chill but great too. It seems like you gettin better and better wit each song ! Keep doin ur thing

[ATLien666]

I loved the first song.. Awesome beat and you just killed it, second one is more something to chill but great too. It seems like you gettin better and better wit each song ! Keep doin ur thing

Right on, bruh, I appreciate it. Yeah, the second song is just some chill shit. It's gonna be just 4 mins of me rapping, lol.

[MC_Crary]

Beat is definitely ASAP's style and the pitched down parts on the hook would be ASAP's style too. That's where the comparison stops for me. The beat's a bit loud compared to the vocals on this one bro. Enjoy the flow on this, but you're getting drowned out so I'm missing some of the lyrics. Work on the mix on this. This one has major potential. Beginning of the untitled track made me laugh too. The sped up part of the verse is off. Sometimes its hard to get it those switch ups right. Especially when you already have problem's with the flow already. I agree with you though, you really are too good to be this young bro. That hook on the or whatever the singing part is, is horrible imo. Maybe if it was mixed better it'd be ok. Sounds like someone singing at a talent show and you tried to mix it into your recording. Work on that too please.

[ATLien666]

Beat is definitely ASAP's style and the pitched down parts on the hook would be ASAP's style too. That's where the comparison stops for me. The beat's a bit loud compared to the vocals on this one bro. Enjoy the flow on this, but you're getting drowned out so I'm missing some of the lyrics. Work on the mix on this. This one has major potential. Beginning of the untitled track made me laugh too. The sped up part of the verse is off. Sometimes its hard to get it those switch ups right. Especially when you already have problem's with the flow already. I agree with you though, you really are too good to be this young bro. That hook on the or whatever the singing part is, is horrible imo. Maybe if it was mixed better it'd be ok. Sounds like someone singing at a talent show and you tried to mix it into your recording. Work on that too please.

Appreciate the thorough feedback, I'mma go through and try to level the shit out and the two other songs I mixed in were just fillers, lol. The first was Bo Burnham, who is an excellent song writer/comedian, imo and the second one just sounds like that. lmao. Now, Now has a very lo-fi quality to their music, lol. But I'mma either post the full version of Graduation or the Untitled one tonight.

[Griffin504]

good work bruh