Runaway

[beaniebeanz]

Jus a little verse yaknow...

Verse 1
I wanna runaway
dont wanna face another day
make this life a history
cuz all thats its given me, is misery
and even for me,
its turned into a mystery,
i cant even trust my own family,
talkin behind back, like i never heard that,
i keep lettin it go, keep lettin it go,
but how long can one man go,
without breaking,
its breathtaking, to see somebody,
tolerate, so much anger and hate,
and still stand tall,
and still be loyal to them all,
now tell me can i really rely on you,
can i really trust you to stay true,
cuz what they want is your money, thts all,
try bein broke, and then give them a call,
they'll laugh it off like a joke,
when life gets tough, dont curl up and cry, do the opposite, stand tall and smile
let your enemies know
that your unbreakable
never let your sorrow be exposed
instead let your anger resurrect
cuz you see in reality theres no wishing well
you got to rebel for the right of a proper life in this hell

[StephenKING]

deep,introspective lyrics, will you be recording this? its artistic, I don't really have neg. for this type of thing overall 4/5

[Valv]

Jus a little verse yaknow...

Verse 1
i keep lettin it go, keep lettin it go,
but how long can one man go,

I liked everything but this part, consider changing the second "go" to something else, rhyming go 3x in a row sounds funky to me. Go is easy to rhyme so change it up! "I keep letting it go, I just let it flow" or something.

[beaniebeanz]

thanks man and i dunno if i'll record it, i jus write to get things out of my mind to be honest