J-Smooth- RWT (freestyle)

[JSmooth]

back with another freestyle had to go in on a Big Sean beat…as always feedback much appreciated


RWT- RWT Freestyle.mp3




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[dodson495]

its dope man keep it up for real

[Tha Professor]

Yo u went ham on this, Ima hit your email soon btw

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

punchlinesw for days this probably my favorite aggresive type track from you, when that tape droppin fool

[JSmooth]

punchlinesw for days this probably my favorite aggresive type track from you, when that tape droppin fool

yea i got carried away on this one….plan on droppin it next month

[mykill]

The only critique I could give this is that you need more ferocity in your voice sometimes. It's like how people would say that "you say some hard stuff, but you dont sound hard". A lotta ppl think it to be just adlibs, but some of the growling and "uhs" by rappers help carry the verse and give it more aggression. I'm not saying you gotta do anything corny, just sound more aggressive when you spit some of the stuff. ya feel me?

Overall: 3.5/5

[JSmooth]

The only critique I could give this is that you need more ferocity in your voice sometimes. It's like how people would say that "you say some hard stuff, but you dont sound hard". A lotta ppl think it to be just adlibs, but some of the growling and "uhs" by rappers help carry the verse and give it more aggression. I'm not saying you gotta do anything corny, just sound more aggressive when you spit some of the stuff. ya feel me?

Overall: 3.5/5

ya i feel you. i might try to record songs and deliver them different ways each time just to see what i like best

[ATLien666]

"all I give these hoes is two nuts and cab rides." it's a shame you followed hot lines with that Pops line. You seem to good for corny, cliched lines. But you flowed well over this and lyrics were dope and you got nice punchlines, scattered around a lot of corny ones. Don't ever say game like EA again. Nobody thinks shit like that is clever anymore, but I digress. But I agree with Mykill, there needs to be some more aggression. It's why nobody can do Big Sean's or Meek's beats like them. Their flow is backed by aggression and amazing delivery. you got the flow and shit down.

4/5

[THA GR8 M8]

I don't really see any problem with the delivery. The flow was really dope. And you had a lot of dope lines, but way too many wack lines man lol. It was always like... you had a few HOT lines going then ended them with a wack one so it through me off. But the track isn't bad, the corny lines were the only complaint for this one. 4/5

[JSmooth]

I don't really see any problem with the delivery. The flow was really dope. And you had a lot of dope lines, but way too many wack lines man lol. It was always like... you had a few HOT lines going then ended them with a wack one so it through me off. But the track isn't bad, the corny lines were the only complaint for this one. 4/5

yea i mean this is a freestyle so not really too much time to decide if a line is corny or not lol

[Explicit]

Loved it! Great quality, lyrics were pretty good and also the bits were you started singing a little bit were pretty good, you got a good voice man, could defiantly see this song being popular, 10/10

[BlakeJay]

Dope..you always come with the Punchlines, some of em were simple but its a free verse so I can understand that....I don't have a problem with your delivery or aggression or anything like that..I thought it worked well..Flow was on point as well..

Lyrics 4/5

Flow 4.2/5

Overall 4.1/5