first rap song

[Zimmie]

this is the first rap ive ever properly wrote i mean ive written others but this is my first i guess proper one


ill make you fall flat
no need for gats like pow
population zero
only me and me looking in the mirror
listen to my words plural
i dont fear em
i just smear em
blood dripping from your forehead
put you bitches to bed
ill unload lead into your diaframe
picture you like instagram
eat your lugs
take the breath outta ya
pun intended
where's my lecture
i don't lecture i just flex ya
thin you a warrior
then come out to play this is your horror
your worst nightmare

thanks if you actually took the time to read this opinions would be appreciated

[Zimmie]

holy fuck this is terrible i remember i was super into Odd Future was tryna go for that horrorcore shit lmaooooo

[Lucifer]

holy fuck this is terrible i remember i was super into Odd Future was tryna go for that horrorcore shit lmaooooo

[BloodKin]

holy fuck this is terrible i remember i was super into Odd Future was tryna go for that horrorcore shit lmaooooo

dude this good, with a little extra touch it will

see there "thin thread" between love&hate. got loaded pistol... ready.. bout 2 tear hole's in these sheets, spread em & make em margin.
keep between the lines, cuz what "WE" bout 2 offer gonna make you get sum bread and butter.

take em to the bridge. cement plastic and poprorri, 4 the fish. still smell the blood.

[Waynasite]

dude this good, with a little extra touch it will

see there "thin thread" between love&hate. got loaded pistol... ready.. bout 2 tear hole's in these sheets, spread em & make em margin.
keep between the lines, cuz what "WE" bout 2 offer gonna make you get sum bread and butter.

take em to the bridge. cement plastic and poprorri, 4 the fish. still smell the blood.

Gay

[BloodKin]

Gay

what part feel was "gay" like homo gay or just general gay? gotta know man.. please tell