Random unfinished verse I wrote

[ThaWeezy]

Looking for constructive criticism, I wrote this in like 20 mins or so

Girl you're beautiful don't let anybody tell you otherwise
It's like I soar through the skies when I look into your eyes
Stay by my side, I don't intend to become bored of you
Sorry if I'm annoying at times I don't mean to bother you
If you'll be my Juliet I'll gladly be your Romeo
Just like in the story, but we'll re-write the ending though
Let's dance, Grab my hand, we'll escape to a distant land
Just me and you against the world, you're my angel and
I really hope I get to keep you forever and ever
You're the woman I hope my future kids call their mother
You complete me, you were the missing piece to my life's puzzle
Let's run thru the rain, let's jump in the puddles
Just like little kids, with nothing else to worry about
And whenever you need it I'll always be there to help you out

[walkerwiseman]

I like it. It pretty good lyricly.

[Adam H]

That's a tight verse man! Props on that and if you're lucky enough to know someone that makes ya feel this way then I wish you guys luck

[BloodKin]

Blue forest wood����

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everything after "Just like in the story, but we'll re-write the ending though"

was a 10 out of 10