The one

[codys]

i haven't really thought of a name for myself yet lol but i just started actually trying to rap so don't go to hard on me. constructive criticism is appreciated, i fucked up on editing but I'm just starting to learn bout editing and all that. lmk if I'm too monotone please

https://soundcloud.com/codsky/c-one

feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...freestyle.html
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...poundcake.html


Feedback please! I wanna know what I need to fix ill start postin other songs too. Like I said I haven't been doin this that long.

[ATLien666]

Strangely, this song is a lot better flow wise than the other one. you have a very laid back flow, I wouldn't exactly call it monotone, but I like it. Flow still needs some work and lyrics could use a little improvement - either multis, similes, metaphors, good imagery, extended metaphors, etc. are always good. It's hard to do everything different, especially for a topic like this, but throwing in some creative punchlines or whatever helps. I noticed a multi and probably skipped some, but the muscular dystrophy seemed forced. Some people like that, I'm eh on it. also the mixing is quality for the most part, but there are two or three parts where your audio gets really low for a split second for some reason.