Can Anybody Give Feedback

[KamZiro]

Ok Guys Here Is A Poem My Friend Wrote, So He Needs A Feedback On It, Me I See The Poem GOAT TBH, So How About Y'all... Dont Worry About Rhyming...

My Love For Her,
Is Gas
For Her Body,
Is Liquid
For Us,
Is Solid...

In The Gas Form
She Breath It
And Cant Live Without It.
Harmless Gas, Flowing In Her World...

In The Liquid Form
Is All Over Her Body And Veins
Keeping Her Healthy 24/7
365 Days Per Year
Surrounding Her Like Ozone Layer
If You Know Ozone Layer
Characteristics,
Then You Will Know How It Goes...

Then Lastly, In The Solid Form
None Will Break It
Or Get Through It
Even Though It Can Be Extinct
Fossils Will Remain
I Doubt It'll History
But Geography And Maths...

[dntbanme]

niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

[TinyPenisProductions]

Well for one there are 365 and 1/4 days per year

N then all of your words have the first letter capitalized

Then It Was A Struggle To Read Altogether

My advice: get a 7 year old to write a poem for ya

[KamZiro]

[MENTION=82351]TinyPenisProductions[/MENTION] I Said Is My Friend's Poem And You Only Destroying The Self Esteem, Well Thanks Anyway For Nothing, I Thought You'll Change, But Hey, Ones A Jerk, Always A Jerk :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( All I Wanted Was A Feedback Not The Bullshit You Wrote

[TinyPenisProductions]

@TinyPenisProductions I Said Is My Friend's Poem And You Only Destroying The Self Esteem, Well Thanks Anyway For Nothing, I Thought You'll Change, But Hey, Ones A Jerk, Always A Jerk :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( All I Wanted Was A Feedback Not The Bullshit You Wrote

lol all that for a poem

[Love Is In The Air]

We all know you're not posting for a friend who you think is "GOAT".That being said keep working at it you obviously have conscious thoughts going on in your head which is more then we can say for most of this generation.And you obviously love this chick a lot lol be careful with that it's a dangerous thing.