Control remix

Excuse the silence at the start. Soundcloud won't let me upload it otherwise

Here's my control verse. Wrote it last year but re-recorded it last night cause no-one was home and I was angry AF

you a selfish fuck so I'll come first before you have a chance
these arent just words, a birdcall for the ambulance
could murk yall but id rather see you suffer, that's
why I'll speak and spit poison in these vicious raps
get you bagged up like im dorwning cats
sacked quick get your defence off their fucking ass
throwing hail mary shots as i drive past
my aim is so straight im like the pope, i hate fags
you a dramatic cat like drakes past
as sensitive as a drake smash or a raped ass
faker than a triple h match lies ornate like plait glass
weaker than a jay stan giving head for backstage pass
your fake ass smiling as if you know me
then duck behind my back and threaten me like tony
questioning why my face is stoney, blow me
choke on my cock and my bloated cahones

when i come youll need the order of the phoenix
im a demon and right now im teething
dont fuck with a heathen my souls been feeding
upon the flesh of the breathing and undead grieving
don't fuck with me like a calm evening
i'll take your life away cause i'm good with thieving
i'll steal you with the steel whilst your family's sleeping
bleeding without reason your family woken by the screaming
your blood is just the sweetening, forsting my batter
shattering your dome just to watch the blood spatter
a dexter wet dream collecting your grey matter
bad luck for you like you living under ladders
i'm not even a rapper i'm just full of hatred
fed up with your faking and my amygdala is aching
i cant rest till i'm rid of ya and free of this pervading
sense of hostile force and character debasing
I'll eat a lit match and spit hot ashes in your eyes
I'll take a pick axe and turn your ribs to fries
I'll douse you in hot wax till Tussaud buys your guise
I'll set your cat alight and serve it as fried rice
I'll twist your nose till you snot in your own eyes
i'll scar your face with a blunt and rusty blade
have your own family recoiling in disgrace
I'll spray your sister with mace so she can't escape
use her ass as bait to reel in criminal weight
use her as a payment for their service in your fate
provide them with a gun, a date and a place
i'll extract revenge in the most vicious of ways
pierce your eyes with needles, slap you till your feeble
attack you with your steeples, get you thrown out quick
my tongue may be lethal but my actions don't get fixed
once you're spayed and neutered you'll know just how i fix
feed your shrivelled future to a pitbull and its kids
chop off your right ear and listen for your apology
you're a bitch, fuck off and stop fucking dogging me

EDIT: Soundcloud not being cool right now. bear with me.

[LilTunƎchi]

This was dope yo

Now this is what i was talking about when i said put more soul into it, it's so much better now.

Y u mad tho

[Theonlydjorkaeff]

This was dope yo

Now this is what i was talking about when i said put more soul into it, it's so much better now.

Y u mad tho

Thanks man! Angry.. Always angry

[@Poyo_Kardashian]

why was you angry? you should get a better mic and your accent threw me off a little but respect for just going in for straight 2 and half minutes

[Liz]

I don't think I ever want to piss you off...

[KingEz514]

Your flow is off sometimes, pretty good rhymes tho and you might wanna get a new mic

[-Tunechi-]

dope lyrics, just work on the flow a little bit and get quality 3/5

[Theonlydjorkaeff]

why was you angry? you should get a better mic and your accent threw me off a little but respect for just going in for straight 2 and half minutes

yeah man i need a better mic but honestly cant justify the money for it.

I don't think I ever want to piss you off...

ha! im only hard on wax. keyboard warrior

Your flow is off sometimes, pretty good rhymes tho and you might wanna get a new mic

yeah i found it hard to flow over this, especially whilst rapping so aggressively. i dunno.. i am still developing a flow that works for me. its the part of rapping i struggle with most

dope lyrics, just work on the flow a little bit and get quality 3/5

thanks mate much appreciated on the feedback.

[Laudacity93]

I like this bro, hell yeah. the energy is awesome! I don't really get why people are saying get a better mic sounds good to me, It's all about how you mix it. I'll give it 4.7/5 Definitely the best I've heard from you so far. Keep it up bro

[Theonlydjorkaeff]

I like this bro, hell yeah. the energy is awesome! I don't really get why people are saying get a better mic sounds good to me, It's all about how you mix it. I'll give it 4.7/5 Definitely the best I've heard from you so far. Keep it up bro

thank you man thank you so much for listening! much appreciated

[mykill]

Lyrics were on point. Mixing and such.... not so much. Punch-ins are obvious... Mic Presence got there slowly throughout the track. Got grimy wit it - I like that. Work on your mixing man. Just cut that silence out in the mix or something, or do it after your encode the track. One way or another, should be there.

Mykill's Verdict: 3.6/5