Justice

[KidComet]

Here is a song I did like 2 days ago just testing concepts and practing storytelling I just want some quick feedback






https://soundcloud.com/black-philoso...od-canis-major






Lyrics

SPOILERWhy you wanna put me in these hand cuffs
He looked me in my eyes and cop told me stand up
Look . You know we got you on the camera
You tried to run away but didn't have stamina
You got the wrong guy , to I'm tellin no lie
I can prove it , I got an allabie
He didn't bat an eye
My talking was useless
He didn't say a word he Taught I was stupid
How can they do this do this
I was innocent
How can I prove this
I don't know
But the way them system work
When Victim hurt , the guilty get away and the innocent can kick the dirt
Uh
Plus I'm black man they treat me like a trash can
Throw me away, like they did to the last man I ain't gonna last man look how they laugh damn



When ya living in white man world
Life is a trick wanna fight that girl
Gotta do yo best gotta bite that pearl



When ya living in a white man world
no justice ain't no peace
This is the reason I don't trust police
Them cop kill us all and It must decrease X 2






We need to fix our ways and adjust these streets
Twisted up my arm Put me in the back of the car
Off to the jail it's fact that it's far
I started rapping a bar
And acting afar
They told to me pipe down
Tried crashing a star
I told em I'm be someone
someday
I don't want the gun play I'm make some way
They told me ima see judge on Monday ...
You U can bail out only if you have the money
Danf can you please let me out
You don't wanna see a grown man pout
. Can we call it a day and drop mr off at my house they said no, thata isn't what were really about



When ya living in white man world
Life is a trick wanna fight that girl
Gotta do yo best gotta bite that pearl
When ya living in a white man world


no justice ain't no peace
This is the reason I don't trust police
Them cop kill us all and It must decrease
We need to fix our ways and adjust these streets x2




look at me I'm innocent why you beingignorant why you look at black people think that were illiterate
Why did you arrest me I can't prove my innocents
I may fit the description but i think it is coincidence
Yeah I got a hoodie on and I'm wearing all black
ZIf your lookin in the hood you will see that that's half
And at the time of the crime
I was in the studio trying to rhyme
I got my boys , really, they will tell you
They ain't go lies that the trying to sell you
Come mister officer please have a heart
Then I saw them gates open up and come apart



When ya living in white man world
Life is a trick wanna fight that girl
Gotta do yo best gotta bite that pearl





When ya living in a white man world
no justice ain't no peace
This is the reason I don't trust police
Them cop kill us all and It must decrease

We need to fix our ways and adjust these streets x2































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[KidComet]

no love?:9

[LilTunƎchi]

no love?:9

i fucks with it heavy

[Youssef Samir]

dope, i really like it

[Vocker]

thats some quality music bruh

[mykill]

Here is a song I did like 2 days ago just testing concepts and practing storytelling I just want some quick feedback






https://soundcloud.com/black-philoso...od-canis-major

You always delete these before I can check em out... :/

[KidComet]

You always delete these before I can check em out... :/

I put it back

its just that i feel like them niggas be lying to me i want honest feedback, For some reason I have an ear for everybody elses music except my own

[Laudacity93]

I digg the concept. It's real i fucks with it, the only thing the points in the song where you add a accent it sounds forced and unnatural 3/5

[KidComet]

I digg the concept. It's real i fucks with it, the only thing the points in the song where you add a accent it sounds forced and unnatural 3/5

Dang I try to not have an accent but my dad is jamacian and my mom is from the carribean so it just comes out, mayb it will sound more natural if i speak into it all the way?

[Laudacity93]

Dang I try to not have an accent but my dad is jamacian and my mom is from the carribean so it just comes out, mayb it will sound more natural if i speak into it all the way?

Oh I couldn't tell at first but some parts its clearer than others. I'm Haitian on my dad side so I understand what you mean. shit bro use that to your advantage

[Flame Beats]

dope song 4.5/5

[wfb804]

this is dope fr