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  • Such Is Life/ Midnight Musik (FINISHED)



    Second Song that i've fully written and recorded tell me what you guys think

    LYRICS:
    such is life caught up in a strife
    get all poetic as i grip the mic
    imma tap into my mind and take flight
    people want to fight but i don’t think thats right
    i travel with a heavy mind but fly light
    up in the sky bouncing and weaving like a kite
    like a lions bite i got a lot of might
    but life is nothing but a long night


    such is life I’m all about my grind
    all about watching the time as it passes by
    not aiming for a life that is regular
    everybody get all technical then they get mad at yer
    im just telling you how it is don’t shoot the messenger
    travelling through life and I’ve had a lot of passengers
    but they all vanish like I’m committing massarces
    characters turn up as life occurs
    express my self through the use of words
    hear the sound of nature and all the birds
    and still end up glorifying the curb




    they just fail in comparison
    pail in my hand son as i climb and run up the mountain
    drink out of the fountain of youth
    infinite youth in the booth
    I’m broke like a chipped tooth
    never lose cruise through the winter blues
    wearing everybody’s shoes please save your views
    your thoughts are there to amuse
    life is life i win and i lose
    don’t glorify the fools i use the tools
    to break the rules cool?


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    I also ended up recording the full version of Midnight Musik i think it came out pretty sub-par let me know what you guys think





    #FREEVELVET

  • #2
    Your delivery in my opinion needs a lil work. I would focus on saying things cohesively in a structure. So when the listener listens they can understand what you saying. Lyrics is half the battle adapt a rhythm. Listen to birds, they have bird calls in a structured rhythm. Adapt that. Not bad for a second song tho. I followed you on SC.
    https://linktr.ee/sideshowkvlz

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    • #3
      Originally posted by Laudacity93 View Post
      Your delivery in my opinion needs a lil work. I would focus on saying things cohesively in a structure. So when the listener listens they can understand what you saying. Lyrics is half the battle adapt a rhythm. Listen to birds, they have bird calls in a structured rhythm. Adapt that. Not bad for a second song tho. I followed you on SC.

      I appreciate the feedback bro




      #FREEVELVET

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      • #4
        Originally posted by Lil_zimmie View Post
        I appreciate the feedback bro
        No prob keep it up!
        https://linktr.ee/sideshowkvlz

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