16bars?

[Dreezy Baby]

Yo,guys i havent written a 16 in sooooo fuckin long,but im bout to do this collab and instead of freestylin i wanted 2 write it,so any feedback would be cool,still dont know if im going to use it or not. thanks guys


Stay in the fast lane... gotta get the cash mane
Stay noticable, like a white t with a black stain
If u don't, u become nothing but a wack lame
So I just stay fuckin' with the track like a damn train
Keep it on the stove i know it cook by it self
I'm jus tryna stay on top like a book on a shelf
Bringin straight noise u gon hear me like a car fell
So yall niggas gn have to wait (weight) like a barbell
I'm in the sky, u finna hear a star yell
What is a cat to a big dog? u just a Garfield
Girls all on me but i only got 1 dick
Bringin mo heat then volcanoes and the sun mixed
A buncha lame rappers, shit some sick
But like a short penis pornstar they cum quick
no homo like DMC u betta Run bitch
Cuz hoe i spit fire like my mothafuckin tounge lit

[trillphill]

Re: 16bars?

Yo,guys i havent written a 16 in sooooo fuckin long,but im bout to do this collab and instead of freestylin i wanted 2 write it,so any feedback would be cool,still dont know if im going to use it or not. thanks guys


Stay in the fast lane... gotta get the cash mane
Stay noticable, like a white t with a black stain
If u don't, u become nothing but a wack lame
So I just stay fuckin' with the track like a damn train
Keep it on the stove i know it cook by it self
I'm jus tryna stay on top like a book on a shelf
Bringin straight noise u gon hear me like a car fell
So yall niggas gn have to wait (weight) like a barbell
I'm in the sky, u finna hear a star yell
What is a cat to a big dog? u just a Garfield
Girls all on me but i only got 1 dick
Bringin mo heat then volcanoes and the sun mixed
A buncha lame rappers, shit some sick
But like a short penis pornstar they cum quick
no homo like DMC u betta Run bitch
Cuz hoe i spit fire like my mothafuckin tounge lit

im sorry to say this shadow but your hair's nappy.
not even showerin can fix somethin that nasty.
and what's that you said? your voice is raspy.
not to mention your skin is ashy,
and you in the booth? bet it's a catastrophy.
cus i spit real shit, this is apathy.
addin to your homo "bio" where i let the truth speak.
you rap like you got wayne's dick in your booty.
but how im gonna rap, it stay a mystery.
i'd deport you to africa if i had power like judge judy.
at survival your ill, during rain you'd survive foreal.
cus your skin could start a fire in an instant still.
and your voice bein raspy , that aint classy,
and that lip piercing? now i know your funky.
you probably have a tongue earring
cus you like the dick in your mouth feeling.
not even recyclers would use the trash you speak.
cus the wack shit would infect many a day,
somethin like a never ending bubonic plague.
you're superman with no grace,so i'll abate your disgrace.
i'll beat you with my lyrics till you make way and dissipate.
it seems as though the lyrics i speak is ya kryptonite,
but it's dick that puts you to your knees in spite.
so run off and play with them animals at the zoo.
you'll befriend them because they look just like you.

it's "the studio", don't take it personal

[Dreezy Baby]

Re: 16bars?

(Ignoring haters) I decided i might use one of Fredd's beats

[biggie>wayne]

Re: 16bars?

good job shadow

[Dreezy Baby]

Re: 16bars?

good job shadow

Thanks bro

[YoungMoneyEnt]

Re: 16bars?

sick dude
some killer punchlines

[trillphill]

Re: 16bars?

good job shadow

Thanks bro

changed his avy...

[Dreezy Baby]

Re: 16bars?

sick dude
some killer punchlines

Thanks man!

[YungNRuthless]

Re: 16bars?

(Ignoring haters) I decided i might use one of Fredd's beats

following the footsteps of YNR lol i love it