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  • Twiggz - I'm The Man

    Well...yeah. First real song i actually sat down and 'wrote' Haven't done much of doing this at all, so any feedback is welcome. Please help me in what i can gain, and what i should lose.
    I'm recording off of a webcam microphone, so not much help there
    But here, check it out.

    Lyrics:
    Problems is what these girls givin' me
    Tryna be my friend? More closer to the enemy
    I'm just tryna do me, and have fun too
    Females try to get under my skin like bugs do.
    Yes, you know my swag is on a million.
    My money raised higher, it's more like a billion.
    I need a Brazilian, dark skin long hair
    Ass so round, booty shaped like a fruit pair
    She got small feet, and a little waist.
    Her body so fit, that she could win first place.
    But, lets get back to the money.
    One grand, then five grand, now a hundred.
    Watch me do me, haters can fall back.
    Hope, spirit and courage is what you dudes lack.
    Have a heart attack, when they hear me rap.
    Your girl is like a keg, yeah she's been tapped.
    By me, i'll be number one
    And nine months later, she'll be havin my son
    Then i'll be the winner when it's all said and done.
    Gettin money and the power is how i won.
    Little man can't do it like i can
    I'll be takin trips, you're nowhere near Japan
    Doing shows on the road wasn't part of the plan
    But at the end of the day, i'm still the big man.

    Chorus(x2)
    I'm the man, you can't do it like i can
    Being on the road wasn't part of the plan
    But i gotta keep my head up as high as i can
    and my feet on the ground for as long as i stand.

    You know you paid, when you got Weezy witcha
    Mess with us and we'll kill ya.
    Betcha didn't know thats what we about
    Haters keep talkin, shit leakin from your mouth
    Next will be blood, flowin like a flood
    Dirty white tee, cause you fell in mud
    Slower than a slug, hit you with a slug
    Now you feelin sluggish, you garbage like rubbish
    Take your ass out, bury your body
    No fingerprints, evidence, or shotty
    Hop in your car, take it for a joyride.
    Now you know that we have no reason to hide
    Your girls on my side, she's my ride or die.
    From the day that you died, nobody even cried.
    Yeah, you know that we all lied.
    Then we sat there and cried, laughing
    as your last moments as you stared into my eyes.

    Chorus(x2)
    I'm the man, you can't do it like i can
    Being on the road wasn't part of the plan
    But i gotta keep my head up as high as i can
    and my feet on the ground for as long as i stand.
    Last edited by Twiggz; 10-04-2010, 11:01 PM.

  • #2
    Re: Twiggz - I'm The Man

    Flow: C
    Lyrics: D+

    Stay on your grind. Getcha a good mic so we can hear ya clearer. Those $10 karaoke mics at Wal-Mart work wonders till you can shell out the $100+ for something good-good. Far as the rap is concerned I'm intrigued, but there's something not there to captivate me. Why use a remake of the Donnis - "I'm Gone" beat? Why not just use the actual beat? You dont seem confident on the mic for some reason. Lyrically, I think you could do something more interesting and entertaining. Chorus wise, doesnt seem very imaginative.

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    • #3
      Re: Twiggz - I'm The Man

      I listened to this one yesterday twiggz
      You have the flow down packed like a mothafucka
      I like the way you managed to tell the truth in the beginning of the first verse... a woman can get on yo mothafuckin nerves
      and the way you ended the first verse w/ the title name was genius

      But at the end of the day, i'm still the big man.


      I could give a fuck less about how the mix sounds because i dont know how to mix my damn self. It really doesnt matter what type of mic you record on because plugins can fix anything. If you tryna get outcha your feelings right now... dont worry about the mix. You can always watch some youtube videos on mixing on your spare time n shit.
      Fuck a 100 dollar mics because those dont even do the jobs that people think they do

      I'm tryna get a C414 for 1400 right now
      I'm rethinking my whole gameplan, sir
      You have tight shit

      Flows an A
      and lyrics are A+ to me
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      • #4
        Re: Twiggz - I'm The Man

        dope ish,

        i use to record through headphones.

        is ya girl native american??
        EVERYONE CHECK MY MUSIC OUT, AND PM ME IF U HAVE ANY REQUESTS AND INQUIRIES !!!!!

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