Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

Right on, bro. I appreciated it!

[Enigma]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

this more like some singin shit or poetry. i dont know how u'd fit all that in a rap.

As said a few posts up, you sum up a majority of people on this site - you're a dumb fuck. You shouldn't be allowed to listen to this genre.

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

http://limelinx.com/files/503c515eb91a4 ... be0bfa57f4

http://limelinx.com/files/30820f78d091c ... d15c7b1c4a

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

Here's another song I just did.

http://limelinx.com/files/d1f4962ab3737 ... c5d573ec10

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

About time the forum got done, but it looks way better. Congrats on that!

I've been working on some new songs:

YouTube - deezle317's Channel

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

Oh yeah, does anyone have any tips for improving metaphors/similes?

[iTzDrizzyDrake]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

work on your flow. good lyrics with no flow wont get you anywhere

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

work on your flow. good lyrics with no flow wont get you anywhere

True, right on. I'm trying to improve on it.

[Lil_Weezy_]

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Holy shit those lyrics were FIRE.

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

Holy shit those lyrics were FIRE.

Right on, man. That means, alot.

[ATLien666]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

I woke up this morning, and I swear my mind is on a paper chase/
6,000,000,000 people on this earth, and I really love a paper face?/
They used to say money changed people, really, it just opened up their eyes/
Without money, love and friendship is genuine, now it's mostly all lies/
So why are we stressin' over a life harder than what we're livin'?/
It's because with money, you can live out your dreams and visions/
So livin' in a fantasy, dream world, kinda like the Matrix/
Money warps it to your own, not everyone can make it/
So, I guess I'm speakin' something that ain't used to/
They say I changed, I don't act the same as I used to/
Who really changed, me or them?/
Same nigga, that used to be meeting them/
I just opened up my eyes; friendship had me blind/
Love had me tied, and my city had me bind/
I meant bound, but it's the same nigga that been around/
I just seen things I haven't, and shouldn't/
Friends saying I could, but wishin' I wouldn't/
Tell 'em to follow me, show you what success does, wave to the ones lookin'/
Don't let what you can't do, interfere with what you can do, word to John Wooden/

[JMSN]

Re: Beginner rapper: Rate this lil' song I just wrote.

http://limelinx.com/files/cb0c97492d05f ... 9d6a9a8b40

http://limelinx.com/files/1eb9b46c17f52 ... f07ceaa838

Let me know what you think.

i dont know if you master your tracks or if someone else does but your vocals are a bit high.you could also use a couple effects too. just helping you out bro!