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Alright, I started another for when I hit the studio when my homies this weekend. Let me know how it sounds to you guys. Note that it doesn't go the entire time either. At some points of the beat I take a pause before going back in lol. I orginally freestyled this with my friend while his sis recorded and thought maybe I should lay it to the beat for real.
Here's the instrumental to play with it:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s_pBf0QbR3Q
Unh, check my swag, you can call that shit nike style
I get big bucks, my teeth be outta line
Crazy spanish bitch, I call her borderline
And I collect money like I got a horder mine
We eating over here, you boys just anorexic
and we getting cake over here, you boys just diabetic
You see me, Hi hater
Bitch I'm in the building, you niggas just neighbors
Naw, betta yet the waiter, put them beats on my tray
Kill any nigga that step to me like it's ya doomday
Drop a quick 16 bars, you can call dat shit 4 xanax
I shine like I'm the sun, you other niggas just planets
Yeah, heh, let's gone straight to it
Cuz I went get to shooting, you might think it is a movie
And da way I get a group of girls, you might have thought I was groupie
But I'm like YG, cuz after I get them, I just toot it and boot it.
At this point the beat drops and Busta part comes back in. I'm debating whether I should keep rapping over the pause or do the laugh I did in the video at this part since the last line was kinda a joke (and to me, those last four bars are kinda weak, perhaps I should write something in over that part?). I'm in the middle of writing the second verse (which would span over Busta's part) and am writing to different types of verses: one more my style (similar to the first verse) and another rapid paced verse to show my versatility over tracks. I'll update later when I have both versions done for opinions on which to include.
UPDATE: I decided to just go with the rhyme scheme I started with and continue the second verse like that one. It starts at the point where Busta's verse starts (at the "And I'm feeling like running"). Here's how it sounds so far:
Verse 2:
Leave a nigga dead where he stand, call dat shit a dead halt
Weed got a nigga higher than somersault
Straight beat the pussy up, dey charged me with assault
And you can look at me now, look the swag evolved
Retarded flow, I think I think I should be in CDC
All about a Gamble, I think I should be on BET
Somebdoy tell my haters and dem pussy niggas I said arrive derci
I lost my mind now can someone help me with the searching (<====I love dat line from Wayne lol)
Homey got dat white snow, call dat shit an avalance
pockets full of greenheads, call dat shit a cabbage patch
call me mister cabage patch, having that making racks
hating ass nigga gone pull a rabbit out da magic hat
yeah, you ole fake ass niggas
sweeter than homemade cake ass nigga
Niggas hating on my swag can talk to da body bag
While ya rocking da toe tag after we dumped em like tea bags
eating rappers like pacman, im talking waka waka
make des niggas bow bow but i aint waka flocka
hit em wit da chopper, somebody call da doctor
cause dat chopper shoot a hunnit times, sound like a helicopter
all my niggas proper, we aint on dat bogus shit
you'll think dat boy was sum kush da way we smoked dat bitch
I'm the god of rap, but let me give you some harder facts
I'll make religions believe in me I'll make the martyrs clap
My mic will be an artifact, you hardly rap so shut ya trap
I'm a smarter cat than you dawg, not I mean than you rat
When I die, bury me butt-naked face first in the grass
So I keep fucking da world, while you niggas kiss my ass
Verse 2 ended up being a bit longer than I expected (it ran through the length of Busta and most of Wayne's verse lol). I think I should cut it down and focus on the rhymes more and refine them and make them stand out more on there own.
Here's the instrumental to play with it:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s_pBf0QbR3Q
Unh, check my swag, you can call that shit nike style
I get big bucks, my teeth be outta line
Crazy spanish bitch, I call her borderline
And I collect money like I got a horder mine
We eating over here, you boys just anorexic
and we getting cake over here, you boys just diabetic
You see me, Hi hater
Bitch I'm in the building, you niggas just neighbors
Naw, betta yet the waiter, put them beats on my tray
Kill any nigga that step to me like it's ya doomday
Drop a quick 16 bars, you can call dat shit 4 xanax
I shine like I'm the sun, you other niggas just planets
Yeah, heh, let's gone straight to it
Cuz I went get to shooting, you might think it is a movie
And da way I get a group of girls, you might have thought I was groupie
But I'm like YG, cuz after I get them, I just toot it and boot it.
At this point the beat drops and Busta part comes back in. I'm debating whether I should keep rapping over the pause or do the laugh I did in the video at this part since the last line was kinda a joke (and to me, those last four bars are kinda weak, perhaps I should write something in over that part?). I'm in the middle of writing the second verse (which would span over Busta's part) and am writing to different types of verses: one more my style (similar to the first verse) and another rapid paced verse to show my versatility over tracks. I'll update later when I have both versions done for opinions on which to include.
UPDATE: I decided to just go with the rhyme scheme I started with and continue the second verse like that one. It starts at the point where Busta's verse starts (at the "And I'm feeling like running"). Here's how it sounds so far:
Verse 2:
Leave a nigga dead where he stand, call dat shit a dead halt
Weed got a nigga higher than somersault
Straight beat the pussy up, dey charged me with assault
And you can look at me now, look the swag evolved
Retarded flow, I think I think I should be in CDC
All about a Gamble, I think I should be on BET
Somebdoy tell my haters and dem pussy niggas I said arrive derci
I lost my mind now can someone help me with the searching (<====I love dat line from Wayne lol)
Homey got dat white snow, call dat shit an avalance
pockets full of greenheads, call dat shit a cabbage patch
call me mister cabage patch, having that making racks
hating ass nigga gone pull a rabbit out da magic hat
yeah, you ole fake ass niggas
sweeter than homemade cake ass nigga
Niggas hating on my swag can talk to da body bag
While ya rocking da toe tag after we dumped em like tea bags
eating rappers like pacman, im talking waka waka
make des niggas bow bow but i aint waka flocka
hit em wit da chopper, somebody call da doctor
cause dat chopper shoot a hunnit times, sound like a helicopter
all my niggas proper, we aint on dat bogus shit
you'll think dat boy was sum kush da way we smoked dat bitch
I'm the god of rap, but let me give you some harder facts
I'll make religions believe in me I'll make the martyrs clap
My mic will be an artifact, you hardly rap so shut ya trap
I'm a smarter cat than you dawg, not I mean than you rat
When I die, bury me butt-naked face first in the grass
So I keep fucking da world, while you niggas kiss my ass
Verse 2 ended up being a bit longer than I expected (it ran through the length of Busta and most of Wayne's verse lol). I think I should cut it down and focus on the rhymes more and refine them and make them stand out more on there own.
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