Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

[JMSN]

haven't posted here in fuckin' ages. I don't know all the rules and what not, but I thought i'd share this new shit with ya'll.
new mic, better quality.

Feedback:
http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...s-we-know.html
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EDIT: Lyrics..
(Intro)
ill..
yeah.
Swag Gang
Mr. FTP

Your bitch is short like a midget and my cock is like an elephant
God put me down this Earth, I guess I'm Heaven-Sent
No I do not represent the problems that I can't correct
And they just sayin' that I'm grindin' out my mothafuckin' mind
But no I'm not, I'm just grindin' to see the better times
Sometimes I'm subliminal so just read between the lines
If you feel like givin' up, please don't give in
'Cause the problem is society no it's not within
The government's our enemy, it's just like the 70's
'Cause I got some pot, 2pac, and a lot memories
America is unemployed 'cause half of us got felonies
Cops think we won't change and we'll always stay the same
That's why I'm rhymin' not for the money or the fame
I'm just doin' this so people like me will know my name
So they can play my music when they feel lonely
And sometimes I just think that I don't have some homies

[Franknstein]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

Beat is dope.
Your flow is constant throughout mostly, fell off sometimes though like at 0.46
Your lyrics varied as well, some of it was generic but you had dope lines like the government is our enemy like the 70's.
Quality seemed good heard no static throughout.

7/10

[JMSN]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

Thanks Frank. First verse in over 8 months, so it wasn't perfect and also the mastering isn't PERFECT because I haven't "mastered" the art of mastering with my new mic. Be on the look out for more tracks though, i'll be dropping plenty of tracks with the same concept!

[Young Corruption]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

really liked the song and its been forever and a half since you dropped something. last i heard you was on "keep it real" i think well beside the other track you sent me today lol.
"If you feel like givin' up, please don't give in
'Cause the problem is society no it's not within
The government's our enemy, it's just like the 70's
'Cause I got some pot, 2pac, and a lot memories
America is unemployed 'cause half of us got felonies"
straight up best lyrics i've heard in a long time. mastering does need work but with a new mic thats understandable and i know that will get better. good job Dylan for real

[KidComet]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

The only problem I had with this was I think I heard too much reverb in your adlibs, and I think your vocals should be raised just a little.
But that's just the editing shit.
Your Delivery and flow were on point.
Good song.

[JMSN]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

Thanks for the feedback everyone. I'll be dropping another song soon and the mastering will be MUCH better. Would like to see more feedback though.

[mykill]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

Bump.

Flow: B
Lyrics: B

Overall: 3.75/5, Mastering of the vocals is low. Reverb is alright on it, but might be a bit too much. Good beat choice for the content. This is a pretty good 16. Flow and delivery seemed to be on the whole way through. Lyrics are solid as well. Just work on those technical issues and you're good to go. Welcome back.

[Jewazi]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

I like the flow to it

[cardenas4o9]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

Flow on this was beautiful and the lyrics were goooooood. only thing i could find wrong with it is the mastering could be a little better, but im not good enough to tell you how to fix that lol

I give it a 4.25 if that mastering was perfect then i would give it a 5

[chippyr]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

First off, your vocals are too low and its hard to hear you guys. Flow seems pretty tight, and the sample reminds me of perfect dark for some reason haha. Lyrics are pretty good, but could be a bit better. Overall I like it though. 3.5/5

[YUNG DIEZEL]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

Your bitch is short like a midget and my cock is like an elephant

WTF, man

[ATLien666]

Re: Real Eyes, Realize, Real Lies-Mr. FTP

Damn, I forgot you were even a member here! lmao.

Lyrics - Kinda scattered all around the place, you had a few good lines here and there, plus so average, generic stuff. Not bad overall. 3/5

Flow - Was pretty good, you rode the beat well and had a nice flow. I picked up on a few times where you fell off, but nothing serious. 3/5

Overall - 3/5