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  • RayZor - Hopes & Dreams Rmx

    This remix was originally recorded as a one-take freestyle. But then I went over it with the background vocals.
    I kno I use foul lingo a lot. my bad.
    Feedback is appreciated.


    RayZor - Hopes & Dreams RMX
    Instrumental Used: Wiz Khalifa - Hopes & Dreams


    Feedback:
    Kage- 3.0 Cypher
    Poyo - Nikes On My Feet Freestyle
    Last edited by RaYZoR; 11-06-2011, 01:36 AM.

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    Re: RayZor - Hopes & Dreams Rmx

    flow is really dragging; you sound like your holding yourself back, like you're not trying to wake someone up in the next room or something. The Rhythm sounds really "shoe-horned" in some places too, work on a more natural rhythm and get some more energy in your flow to really get things into a groove

    keep at it man
    http://www.ATBeats.com

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    • #3
      Re: RayZor - Hopes & Dreams Rmx

      Originally posted by pgathriller View Post
      flow is really dragging; you sound like your holding yourself back, like you're not trying to wake someone up in the next room or something. The Rhythm sounds really "shoe-horned" in some places too, work on a more natural rhythm and get some more energy in your flow to really get things into a groove

      keep at it man
      lol. I'm not sure what you mean by Shoe-Horned. can you explain? And flow is really dragging?
      The instrumental is looped, but I thought it would be a good one to try. Yeah I will improve on rhythm.

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      • #4
        Re: RayZor - Hopes & Dreams Rmx

        bro it is cool, but not that good. flow is little weak . but overall it is cool. so continue the hard work bro.

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        • #5
          Re: RayZor - Hopes & Dreams Rmx

          Wasn't feeling your flow tbh,
          But I did feel your lyrics
          "I don't need to write lyrics down,I'm the pencil fucking the paper"

          Haha just work on your flow
          Lyrics: B+
          Flow: D
          The borders should be illegal instead of the people, who were here before the bible and all of its sequels

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          • #6
            Re: RayZor - Hopes & Dreams Rmx

            Originally posted by TupacShaquer View Post
            Wasn't feeling your flow tbh,
            But I did feel your lyrics
            "I don't need to write lyrics down,I'm the pencil fucking the paper"

            Haha just work on your flow
            Lyrics: B+
            Flow: D
            by flow are you saying the rhyming bars or referring to something else?
            thanks for the feedback. Will try and work on that.

            ---------- Post added at 04:46 PM ---------- Previous post was at 04:45 PM ----------

            Originally posted by akkucc View Post
            bro it is cool, but not that good. flow is little weak . but overall it is cool. so continue the hard work bro.
            that's not really feedback. but sure I'll work on it. but how do you recommend I fix it?

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