I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

a third of a single verse? thats 32 bars plus an intro no hook.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

I could say all that in about thirty seconds man, yes I was exaggerating a little bit but the point remains valid, hell I could say it in 5 seconds but you wouldn't understand it.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

... the fact that you could say it in 30 seconds is irrelevant.
if you set it to a beat and go at regular speeds of (1,2,3,4 = 1 bar) you will say it over the course of 2 verses which is 32 bars....
when i spit this it comes just a lil over 2 minutes with the intro and the beat just playing by itself when it fades out.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

So you want to be heard for only a fifth of what I would be? You can slow down and speed up as you like, but you just need more words man you're not painting a broad enough picture, two minutes could actually pretty good for that depending on how you say it, I'd have to hear it I'm going by what I'm reading at this moment.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

Yah u just need to hear it to get it.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

I will tell you when you write stuff it's better to do it unlike you're going to say it so you can expand upon your vocabulary and grammar; people respect intelligence and being an entertainer takes a lot of respect. It's different when you're saying it though, because then you're making it blend to a beat. Have to remember they're two different art forms and punctuation and proper spelling makes writing look better, and by being a better writer you'll naturally become better lyrically. Your story does paint a good picture, but there's always something to improve upon. Simply how you have to look at life.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

idk how much experience you have but ive recorded a whole bunch of times with a whole bunch of engineers... it is EXTREMELY important to write the way you are going to say it... it has more meaning and people believe it more THAN when you "write something unlike you're going to say it" .... idk what you're trying to say with that.

Some of the greats dont even write because when they spit its coming from the heart... what I write has to match the energy and the way I say it. Im not gonna write something and not say it the way I wrote it... I think you are just unable to see how I flow with my bars but thats alright im going to post the music in here when its done recording thanks for your feedback.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

I don't write anywhere close to how I say things, people respect how you write look at Shakespeare's writing there's a reason why he's been around so long. I speak as emotionally as I sing, rap, anything. Writing is a means to improve your vocabulary for lyrical improvement. They're two different art forms that benefit one another, if you can't write well you can't rap well. When I'm reading I'm looking for you to paint a picture in my head, not try to understand what you sound like. Same as when I'm rapping or singing... Punctuation, vocabulary, and word play are the paintbrush of writing and if you're more creative at writing you'll be more creative at singing. Like I could have read all that spelled properly and grammatically correct and still got the rhythm from it and understand how you would have said it.

Writing is the best way to improve you're creativity because when you're composing a song it's basically a shortened version of how you'd write it. People that understand rhythm will understand what and how you're going to say it and people that don't, well, their opinion doesn't matter much. Same as you learn pitch in your voice from an instrument, you learn lyrics from writing and reading.

I said it painted a good picture lol, I understand it man all I'm saying is I would've understood the rhythm as well either way because I know certain words can be used differently. When we're just talking you don't write like that, so don't dumb yourself down for the world show them your intelligence in every form of life's canvas.

And yeah when I freestyle or had a microphone to record, I'd pretty much wing it, but I'm pulling from everything I've ever written. I've never been to college but I could go to a university and teach better then 90% of professors, including creative arts. Your writing is for you to understand, if they don't, well who cares...

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

well i refuse to use proper grammar and punctuation in a rap song... everyone else that commented understood it and liked it. for some reason you want me to write like Shakespeare for a rap song lmao... I'm not writing a screenplay, novel, short story etc. I'm not trying to get my "Grammatically correct WRITING GAME" up... I am posting lyrics for a song that I am going to record... get it??????
I'm writing a rap song that has slang, cursing etc. I am not going to write it clean and sophisticated so someone can comment on my use of syntax. it's irrelevant. you dont listen to a wayne or jay z song and wonder if they dotted their I's and crossed their T's.. It's Rap. Understand that. Thanks for your feedback but that's all I need. I am not dumbing down anything... I am adding intelligence with slick talk. I dont want to sound like a president giving a speech--- that's not hip hop.. Rap requires a certain level of slang and slick talk that overpowers the use of grammar.

"and teach better then 90% of professors, including creative arts" -- not with that incorrect conjunction you won't.

P.S. you can't come at me about my grammar and my writing when you write shit like this...the hell is going on here?

"Don't have to I breathe greatness, that beat works for me young man might as well call you Stan cause I've already drowned you, suicidal just sounded depressed, calling me out with curse words while I blurt Truth, I'm more ruthless then Randy Savage wrestle you on the stage of life, my minds higher then a kite you can't even understand what I say, you're confused, I'm your Gardener you unknowing tool. I am Who I am and you think you can compete with the voice of heaven? I'm louder then thunder, strong arm of the Law with no guns, smiling at Zeus as I smite him for fun, come get some."


You're not painting a picture. the voice of heaven? smiting Zeus? ...get real bro.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

That was like 5 seconds of writing lol, it wasn't anything special. Hop up to mount Olympus thunder as I lightning Zeus is Clash of the Titans shit right there. You're taking the fact I quoted scripture and blowing it out of proportion.

It doesn't matter to me how you write it man, I'm just telling you people that understand music are going to catch onto the rhythm and understand how two words can rhyme together either way. Don't ask for advice if you can't handle the response, and than would make you sound like a hill billy saying it out loud, swear that's not even a real word. You are better then people, you use than for ideas bub. Good try though lol. Yes I do realize that comma should be a semi-colon as well, was just a short sentence.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

That was like 5 seconds of writing lol, it wasn't anything special. Hop up to mount Olympus thunder as I lightning Zeus is Clash of the Titans shit right there. You're taking the fact I quoted scripture and blowing it out of proportion.

It doesn't matter to me how you write it man, I'm just telling you people that understand music are going to catch onto the rhythm and understand how two words can rhyme together either way. Don't ask for advice if you can't handle the response, and than would make you sound like a hill billy saying it out loud, swear that's not even a real word. You are better then people, you use than for ideas bub. Good try though lol.

lmao... what? take a crash course in grammar dummy.. I don't think you understand the difference between than and then.
I just googled the phrase ... take a look.
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it's better THAN other people...because its comparative.
Who the hell are you to give me grammar advice when you clearly don't understand it too well yourself ... and THEN when someone tells you you've made a mistake you deny it? get outta here you troll. don't comment on here anymore you're just posting rubbish..

At first you didnt understand that it was 32 bars (2 verses worth).. maybe you cant count idk ... you said it was a third of an actual verse (that was the first sign that you dont know wtf you are talking about)
Then you said I had grammatical errors and that I shouldn't write like i spit
Then I quoted something you wrote...that was utter trash and you said you quoted greek mythology and it was something you did in 2 seconds.... meanwhile the rest of the bars were pure struggle regardless of how long it took you.

THIS PART OF THE FORUM IS TO POST LYRICS BECAUSE YOU DON'T HAVE A MIC AT THE MOMENT. SO YOU'RE WRITING WHAT YOU WOULD BE SPITTING. Do you get it now?

Lemme ask you a straight question.. Why did everyone else that commented understand exactly where I was going with it and even said that they liked it? ...get outta here weirdo.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

Deviant Art isn't correct, sorry than is for adverbs and adjectives aka ideas. I am better then you, slavery is worse than freedom. I said I was exaggerating about that as well, I can read music. My grandma who raised me had a doctorate in English, won't catch me slipping unless it's purposefully.