I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

No. Just. No.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

"An adverb is a part of speech that modifies verbs or any part of speech other than nouns (modifiers of nouns are primarily adjectives and determiners). Adverbs can modify verbs, adjectives (including numbers), clauses, sentences, and other adverbs." Yes. just yes. I didn't come here for a fight, but man you're not going to catch me slipping grammatically. Noun in that sense is referred to as the idea of nouns because it's working off the noun adverb. In my sentence I was referring to the people in those professions, thus standing by themselves. I was reading before I was three and could do trigonometry in third grade, I simply chose a different path then school. See, school is working off of path in that sense or could stand alone thus making then or than the correct pronunciation. Ivy league in this biatch . You weren't wrong, just I was referring to the people and not the idea, so in my case you were. Oh, and I did the then in that case instead of than for dramatic effect. Told you than wasn't real most the time, because it represents an idea and not an object.

English is just complicated because of how subjective ideas and nouns can be.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

Thanks for your input guy but it's clear that you came here to flex your grammatical nuts instead of handing out constructive criticism which by the looks of your work would be irrelevant anyway. No one in a lilwayne fan forum cares about how i spelled a verse and neither do I. I dont have to prove that to the world like you seem to think I need to. I think I've learned all I can from you so let's call it a day.

[DustinKPinson]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

I handed out constructive critisizm and even tooks yours.... Because you were definately right about writing how you say it. You just chose to get angry over everything I said, and no I didn't flex my grammatical knowledge, you told me I was wrong when I wasn't.... At what point in time did I say it was even anything but good lol? Everything I pointed out about it was with how I would say it, I even said I'd have to hear you say it.

I don't say anything to be offensive, but I can't help how you take it and I'm going to respond when something's incorrect. The whole writing correctly thing and I can understand it rhythmically is true as well because I realize how words can be said in pretty much any fashion if they're close to one another. Being a better writer will make you better lyrically, though, and that's just a fact man. Rap in it's essence is poetry in motion, the better writer you are the better vocabulary you have to accent points in your rhythm.

I'm going to take your advice on the writing to other people thing, but when I write something it's to improve and learn language differently. True music doesn't get locked into bars and stuff either man, the rhythm is applied and figured out afterwards. Make the beat work for you, as you're in control of it not vice versa. I'm not bragging when it comes to knowing how to teach, either. Write it to yourself correctly and you will learn much more for future instances then dumbing it down when you know how you're going to say it.

Writing lets you slow down and access your vocabulary, which is the essence of freestyling. If you can do it slow, you can do it fast eventually. Rather I'm good at or not is completely irrelevant because I do know and understand it. The stuff I'm writing does rhyme, that's just how I write it and not how I say it. Words first then rhythm and beat, otherwise you're already locking your mind down before you even start.

[Late122]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

What about posting the beat that you were rapping on if you had any So I could give it a shot?

Intro: Flow is nice on this one and overall good

Overall a nice flow and good rhyming, even tho there is couple weaker lines without that much rhyming words. You could put some double entendres or metaphors to give some lyricism. 8/10 Waiting for your other writings. Let's keep this section alive!

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

appreciate it homie, lemme know the weak lines if u can

[Late122]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

I didn't mean lyrically weak but they don't rhyme that well:

Remember when ya biggest problem was a math quiz?
--Or that fucking bully's head you shoulda bashed in
I guess if you pronounce it differently it rhymes well

Also forget to post the best lines:

--I hear em sayin dam
I'm hope he makes it
but don't even have the time to say happy belated
Haha
---You a joke with that fake smile
--- im more consistent than the muthafuckin bassline

Good flow and rhyming.

[Dukez]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

funny that you posted those lines as the ones you didnt like:
i actually changed it a lil while ago to

"and i been puffin on right angles like a math quiz
shit im talkin L's ima hit it till the casket"

haah thanks for your feedback, my G.

[cGrumm]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

Those are slant rhymes anyway it wouldve sounded nice in a beat

[YoungMoneyBeast]

Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

Thanks for the feedback and I gotta say this is hot, It's all nice and smooth, no lines were too many or missing some syllables

[Dukez]

Haha woooww it's crazy how much you grow and evolve. Can't believe i wrote this tbh. Looking back these were my college years when I was ripping bongs and just listening to beats all day. So nostalgic.

[Lil wayne prezident]

Haha woooww it's crazy how much you grow and evolve. Can't believe i wrote this tbh. Looking back these were my college years when I was ripping bongs and just listening to beats all day. So nostalgic.