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    The first verse was the the first verse i ever wrote, added a second verse, and wah lah, lol i think this is one of my better tracks. i had sore throat but i dont think its not that noticable. Tell me what yall think

    http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...the-floor.html
    http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/tha...tml#post726699
    twitter.com/basedpoyo

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    Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

    It's painfully obvious that it sounds like you're simply reciting your verse from a piece of paper. You're focused more on getting the words out, than how you're saying them. Definitely should work on that. Or start memorizing your lines and recording without reading. (And if that's what you're already doing, then work on it).

    The lyrics are decent. Nothing special. Ray Charles & Fresh Prince line pissed me off because they're overdone but there are some gem lines in here. Flow was on point though. Mixing could have been better. Overall, if you polish up your delivery, then you'd be muchhh better.

    What's A Goon To A Willem Dafoe.

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    • #3
      Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

      Originally posted by DeezyMac View Post
      It's painfully obvious that it sounds like you're simply reciting your verse from a piece of paper. You're focused more on getting the words out, than how you're saying them. Definitely should work on that. Or start memorizing your lines and recording without reading. (And if that's what you're already doing, then work on it).

      The lyrics are decent. Nothing special. Ray Charles & Fresh Prince line pissed me off because they're overdone but there are some gem lines in here. Flow was on point though. Mixing could have been better. Overall, if you polish up your delivery, then you'd be muchhh better.
      I was spitting from memory but i know what you mean it just doesnt sound natural. And What do you mean by mixing? i have no idea what that is lol. thanks for the criticism, hop you enjoy my next track a lil more
      twitter.com/basedpoyo

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      • #4
        Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

        Mixing your vocals better with the instrumental so that the sound is smooth. EQ...Compression....shit like that.

        What's A Goon To A Willem Dafoe.

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        • #5
          Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

          yeah im still learning the production aspects
          twitter.com/basedpoyo

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          • #6
            Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

            First off... I'm not gonna be hard on you, no homo. You aiight but sounds like you're trying to hard to rap ? Just let it come out easy ! No homoo Lol

            Flow: seemed force... i give it 3 though
            Lyrics: Not bad actually! 3
            Overall: 3.... just make sure you're comfortable when you record and you'll be straight..dont force it

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            • #7
              Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

              You have a decent flow. Ofcourse the mixing could be better but ull get that down as you keep on recording songs..The lyrics were aight too..

              Lyrics - 3.8

              Flow - 4.0

              Overall 3.9

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              • #8
                Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

                Originally posted by DreezyBaby View Post
                First off... I'm not gonna be hard on you, no homo. You aiight but sounds like you're trying to hard to rap ? Just let it come out easy ! No homoo Lol

                Flow: seemed force... i give it 3 though
                Lyrics: Not bad actually! 3
                Overall: 3.... just make sure you're comfortable when you record and you'll be straight..dont force it
                Lmaoo, thanks for the feed i was comfortable though when i was recording, you the second person to say it sounded forced lol but i didnt think it was. do i sound more at home on my other tracks?

                ---------- Post added at 04:00 PM ---------- Previous post was at 03:42 PM ----------

                Originally posted by BlakeJay View Post
                You have a decent flow. Ofcourse the mixing could be better but ull get that down as you keep on recording songs..The lyrics were aight too..

                Lyrics - 3.8

                Flow - 4.0

                Overall 3.9
                Thanks! What part of the DMV you from?
                twitter.com/basedpoyo

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                • #9
                  Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

                  Well the lyrics are good, did you do any mixing? Vocals sound is too loud in some points. in the last verse you got it, the best energy and flow right there. 3.9/5 because of the quality and energy. You got potential bro, work on these.

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                  • #10
                    Re: Poyo - Racks Freestyle

                    Originally posted by Late122 View Post
                    Well the lyrics are good, did you do any mixing? Vocals sound is too loud in some points. in the last verse you got it, the best energy and flow right there. 3.9/5 because of the quality and energy. You got potential bro, work on these.
                    Nah I have no fucking clue how to mix! I just rap then put the song out lol. thanks on the feed and for commenting on my page. Love
                    twitter.com/basedpoyo

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