Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

[Patriarch]

HERE IS HOW SHIT IS GOIN DOWN

I couldn't think of a way to begin. Anyway, here is something that seems to me like it would be new to many of you. Each of you will write and post a rap, but unlike the rap that you usually write, the rap that you submit for this contest must tell a story.

It may be long or short and about anything from astrophysics to zoanthropy, but it must tell a story. That means that your rhymes must contain plot development. I don't want to see a bunch of non sequitur punchlines or rap that would be more suited to a battle. This is not the place for that.

We can have everyone vote on the winner or I could just pick one - I don't really care. I'm just trying to breathe some new life into the bloated corpse that is the overall creativity of this forum.

If you don't get what I'm talking about, or need some inspiration, I offer up these three songs as examples:
Stan - Eminem
Dance With the Devil - Immortal Technique
Pray For Me - Joe Budden

Have fun.

[trillphill]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

seems cool, i wish i knew more about history though it would be easier to do this
well i'll try to write something if i get a chance

[YungNRuthless]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

im down

[YungNRuthless]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

I remember when i had nothing for dinner..
no air in the summer, no heat in the winter..
pops was doing coke, so the family was broke..
i know i had to swallow it but i was afraid id choke..
i couldn't pary to god, cause i didn't believe in em..
my mom seen us struggling so she ended up leaving him..
we went back to my homestate, to try to escape..
my mom took em back, boy was that a mistake..
he treated us worse, beat me, i was 12 ofcouse...
i could't hit back, so the family felt trapped..
understand? where im coming from man?
i didnt want it, but i kept it cool as a fan...
so my mom left him again, she got herself a boyfriend,
now this is where i am, i left school, cause of bullys
hung with bad people who carried fullys...
after that my life hasn't been the same,
im depressed, all i really want is a bullet to the brain,
i feel like im on a train, they left me insane,
because its never stop-ing..
then it started to slow down when i met her,
she is beautiful, she can save me im sure,

[Dreezy Baby]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

I remember when i had nothing for dinner..
no air in the summer, no heat in the winter..
pops was doing coke, so the family was broke..
i know i had to swallow it but i was afraid id choke..
i couldn't pary to god, cause i didn't believe in em..
my mom seen us struggling so she ended up leaving him..
we went back to my homestate, to try to escape..
my mom took em back, boy was that a mistake..
he treated us worse, beat me, i was 12 ofcouse...
i could't hit back, so the family felt trapped..
understand? where im coming from man?
i didnt want it, but i kept it cool as a fan...
so my mom left him again, she got herself a boyfriend,
now this is where i am, i left school, cause of bullys
hung with bad people who carried fullys...
after that my life hasn't been the same,
im depressed, all i really want is a bullet to the brain,
i feel like im on a train, they left me insane,
because its never stop-ing..
then it started to slow down when i met her,
she is beautiful, she can save me im sure,

[YungNRuthless]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

funny thing is shadow u could never write like that

[Fredd]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

I remember when i had nothing for dinner..
no air in the summer, no heat in the winter..
pops was doing coke, so the family was broke..
i know i had to swallow it but i was afraid id choke..
i couldn't pary to god, cause i didn't believe in em..
my mom seen us struggling so she ended up leaving him..
we went back to my homestate, to try to escape..
my mom took em back, boy was that a mistake..
he treated us worse, beat me, i was 12 ofcouse...
i could't hit back, so the family felt trapped..
understand? where im coming from man?
i didnt want it, but i kept it cool as a fan...
so my mom left him again, she got herself a boyfriend,
now this is where i am, i left school, cause of bullys
hung with bad people who carried fullys...
after that my life hasn't been the same,
im depressed, all i really want is a bullet to the brain,
i feel like im on a train, they left me insane,
because its never stop-ing..
then it started to slow down when i met her,
she is beautiful, she can save me im sure,

please, stop that. he went hard here

[Dreezy Baby]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

I remember when i had nothing for dinner..
no air in the summer, no heat in the winter..
pops was doing coke, so the family was broke..
i know i had to swallow it but i was afraid id choke..
i couldn't pary to god, cause i didn't believe in em..
my mom seen us struggling so she ended up leaving him..
we went back to my homestate, to try to escape..
my mom took em back, boy was that a mistake..
he treated us worse, beat me, i was 12 ofcouse...
i could't hit back, so the family felt trapped..
understand? where im coming from man?
i didnt want it, but i kept it cool as a fan...
so my mom left him again, she got herself a boyfriend,
now this is where i am, i left school, cause of bullys
hung with bad people who carried fullys...
after that my life hasn't been the same,
im depressed, all i really want is a bullet to the brain,
i feel like im on a train, they left me insane,
because its never stop-ing..
then it started to slow down when i met her,
she is beautiful, she can save me im sure,

please, stop that. he went hard here

Ok but when i want them to stop,and they dont,nothings wrong with that?... smh at all yall dudes

[Fredd]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

Ok but when i want them to stop,and they dont,nothings wrong with that?... smh at all yall dudes

man all I know is that this beef is getting discusting.

[biggie>wayne]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

I WISH


i wish you knew the things i seen
kicked out on the streets with pair of cloths and a sheet
i was in a differnt world i seen things u couldnt belive.
i tryed to over come my life but it just stayed as a defeat.
do u know how it feels to pretty much feel as low as it comes.
yea i was on the bottom.
ppl laughed at me and called me a bum.
but then i ment dude named zay.
he knew how to surive.
he said before u go anywhere take this nine.
so just incase nigga run up on u shoot him till he die.
so my pockets were feeling nice.
had every kind of drug.
but u see that shit dont last
cause i got caught in a flash.
now i am cuffed up in the back
they sent me to jail.
i learned how to suceed
rather then fail.
i was livin so nice now it is gone like a fairy tale.
i felt so alone my skin went pail.
so i finnally got out..
i went to my next sale.
it was about 4 ounces.
dude said flip it and u get half of it.
i said shit, what a deal.
so now my bankroll is real.
i once was the type of person to just scheem and steal.
but now i am changed person did u felt what i feeled?

[MoneyIsEverything]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

Patriarch why don't You spit something, expert? This is your thread and your type of rap.

[biggie>wayne]

Re: Patriarch's Raptastic, Raptacular Rap Contest

he tryed like one time before it was hacked..it wasnt bad