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[waynefan24]

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Ok it's Mo' Rich
Stepped off wit yo bitch
Take her around the corner and hit her wit this Mo' Dick
Yea I gotta be the best
I put all other rappers to rest
And in a rap battle I still come out beating on my chest
Cuz I'm in it to win it
I jus practice neva quit it
And your girl like Shawty Lo, she yell "Get Get Get It!!!"

-Mo' Rich

[Artille]

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[quote=Lyrical JRock]

My material is so outta this world they say i steal
i got robots from mars rapping to my shit saying it's ill
im dancing with the devil, only b/c my bars are made out of hot stile
watch the lyrical sniper, it's deadly and I'm aim to kill
trillphill wanna talk shit and bring me down
im lifting HQ back up with my feet on the ground
it's time for a new movement and different approach
thats why im copping rebirth December 21st
no later or ur catch a ride with 50 cent in a flopped hearse
Some may call me rock b/c my words are powerful and off the top
others call me j b/c i stay blazed in my own world ready to amaze
but those who call me cock are haters and only here to jock

Any feedback would be appreciated.[/quote:2uxx9v9c]
lol my bad bro I got you wih the feedback. I'm gonna come out and say it, I'm glad you aren't stealing lyrics anymore. You have enough talent right here.

Feedback: Try to work on your rhyming a little bit more (i.e. approach and 21st don't rhyme. Unless you say it differently). I was diggin the 50 line, pretty funny. Overall it was straight, it had some moments when I was like "ummm what?" but there were also moments when i was like "Ayy (oj voice) that was cool"

Ok it's Mo' Rich
Stepped off wit yo bitch
Take her around the corner and hit her wit this Mo' Dick
Yea I gotta be the best
I put all other rappers to rest
And in a rap battle I still come out beating on my chest
Cuz I'm in it to win it
I jus practice neva quit it
And your girl like Shawty Lo, she yell "Get Get Get It!!!"

-Mo' Rich

As for you. The last line was said in a song before, but I can't remember the track right now. I'm pretty sure Jae Millz said that. When you said you come out beating on your chest, I was really hoping you would follow it up with something like "CUZ IM A BEAST" or something to tag along with it ya know. Just simple advice.

[waynefan24]

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Ok it's Mo' Rich
Stepped off wit yo bitch
Take her around the corner and hit her wit this Mo' Dick
Yea I gotta be the best
I put all other rappers to rest
And in a rap battle I still come out beating on my chest
Cuz I'm in it to win it
I jus practice neva quit it
And your girl like Shawty Lo, she yell "Get Get Get It!!!"

-Mo' Rich

As for you. The last line was said in a song before, but I can't remember the track right now. I'm pretty sure Jae Millz said that. When you said you come out beating on your chest, I was really hoping you would follow it up with something like "CUZ IM A BEAST" or something to tag along with it ya know. Just simple advice.[/quote]

Oh I've never heard the line used before, but tyga used a similar line of mine in No Ceiling on "Thats all I have" when he said something about records and the guiness I used that before No Ceilings even came out, I was mad bcuz I was like when people hear my song they gon think I jacked him.

[Artille]

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Oh I've never heard the line used before, but tyga used a similar line of mine in No Ceiling on "Thats all I have" when he said something about records and the guiness I used that before No Ceilings even came out, I was mad bcuz I was like when people hear my song they gon think I jacked him.

I stand corrected. The line I was thinking of was Gudda Gudda off of Young Money Hospital. He says "Foolish like Shawty Lo and I'ma g-g-get it".

[Enigma]

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Bravo guys, I feel the love generating towards me. And beaner, I'm the lonely one on here you say? You're the one sticking up for YNR when I don't even go on the offensive, seems like you're the one in need of some company.

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

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Yea Yu Already Kno Who It Is
Mays Throwin Verses Like Hollowtips
Duck & Move Bitch Before You Get Hit
Mays With Barley Legal Thats 2 Nine's Bitch
And I Got That Nina Thats My Side Bitch
Imma Set Her Out She Gon Buss Watch This
POW!
Ol Skool Shit How You Like Me Now
This Aint P.E I Dont Even Play Around
Pop Up On Da Block And Left Errbody Layin Down
Gun Sounds Got Errbody Quiet Now
New Glock And Im Just Anxious To Try it Out
Ace Hood Shit Gutta Now Bitch Ruthless To The Core
Verses Been 1Hundred And Aint Neva Had An Underscore

[Artille]

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Yea Yu Already Kno Who It Is
Mays Throwin Verses Like Hollowtips
Duck & Move Bitch Before You Get Hit
Mays With Barley Legal Thats 2 Nine's Bitch
And I Got That Nina Thats My Side Bitch
Imma Set Her Out She Gon Buss Watch This
POW!
Ol Skool Shit How You Like Me Now
This Aint P.E I Dont Even Play Around
Pop Up On Da Block And Left Errbody Layin Down
Gun Sounds Got Errbody Quiet Now
New Glock And Im Just Anxious To Try it Out
Ace Hood Shit Gutta Now Bitch Ruthless To The Core
Verses Been 1Hundred And Aint Neva Had An Underscore

Why Do You Capitalize Every Word? It Makes No Sense...

Time to write 10 bars about this boy Dizzy
I ain't got much time, so I better get busy
Check it, pussy ass bitch you ain't never held a gun
You're a pussy, you hear gun shots and you run
Nothing personal, I'm just killing you for fun
Never dissed you, so I had to write one
Faggot bitch, you ain't never had a Mack
But that's what you call your boyfriend when he hits you from the back.
I'm gonna stop, you can't fuck with Artille
I can't do 16, cause that would be overkill

That one was basic, but oh well...

[Enigma]

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La vida de Jcock~

Ay, we waz runnin from them lone sharks with mi papa
But he wasn't fast enough, killed by the choppa.
I sprinted faster towards the boarder with mi frijoles
But I had to run back because I forgot my salsa sombrero.
Finally in Estados Unidos, looking at all these gringo's
Trying to find me a garbage can since no afford a home
I wake up early to hear my brother, mi pet rooster sing
He's mi only family member over hear con me
Aie, need to get to work so I can get some dollars and no pesos
I just walk over, find a lawn mower and lift it out of home depot
Ayy but they saw me, AIE papi run faster I tell miself,
My jumping skills won't do so I scream "Please Help!'
Ay wey, but I found an open garage so I snuck in
But there was an old white man inside with his gun tucked in
I say "Mi No ingles senor! Mi no ingles senor!"
And he looks at me like "you just jumped the boarder?"
Aie wey but don't tell the cops please I have no green card
I'll repay you, mano a mano me and your lawn, that's not too hard,
I'll show it who's in charge, now I know that's worth something, free charge?

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

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Yea Yu Already Kno Who It Is
Mays Throwin Verses Like Hollowtips
Duck & Move Bitch Before You Get Hit
Mays With Barley Legal Thats 2 Nine's Bitch
And I Got That Nina Thats My Side Bitch
Imma Set Her Out She Gon Buss Watch This
POW!
Ol Skool Shit How You Like Me Now
This Aint P.E I Dont Even Play Around
Pop Up On Da Block And Left Errbody Layin Down
Gun Sounds Got Errbody Quiet Now
New Glock And Im Just Anxious To Try it Out
Ace Hood Shit Gutta Now Bitch Ruthless To The Core
Verses Been 1Hundred And Aint Neva Had An Underscore

Why Do You Capitalize Every Word? It Makes No Sense...

Time to write 10 bars about this boy Dizzy
I ain't got much time, so I better get busy
Check it, pussy ass bitch you ain't never held a gun
You're a pussy, you hear gun shots and you run
Nothing personal, I'm just killing you for fun
Never dissed you, so I had to write one
Faggot bitch, you ain't never had a Mack
But that's what you call your boyfriend when he hits you from the back.
I'm gonna stop, you can't fuck with Artille
I can't do 16, cause that would be overkill

That one was basic, but oh well...

Dont Know Why I Do It Habit I Guess,Use To Be Something I'd Have To Do For A Punishment Back In Elementary School Guess I Just Got Use To It

HaHa I laugh Cuz That Was A Joke
No Wait Shit Was Trash No Wait It Was Dope
On A Opposite Day Where Everything Is Backwards
So For This Verse You Straigt And Yea Im Gay[Sarcasm]
Everything That You Say Imma Say In My Way
Watch Mays Take Your Little Verse And Reverse Everything You Say
In A Big Way You Say Time To Get Bizzy Not For Dizzy
Cuz Im Havin To Much Fun Makin This Look Easy
Lets See Gettin Every Bitch Wit A Ass That I See
Imma Pussy??
Well Im Hittin Every Shot Im Feelin Kinda Paul Pierc-Y
Very Personal And Im Commin Back For The Victory
Diss Me Again And Youll Be Gone With The Wind
I Aint Say Shit Bout A Mack And I Dont Even Like Men
Only Fuck With Bitches With Bitches As Bestfriends
You Just Fuck With Men But On Here You Pretend
And You Mad Cuz He Called You Mays By Mistake Man
Im Gonna Stop Here But Im Really Just Beginnin
You Cant Beat Mays In Real Life So Just Have Fun Pretendin

[Artille]

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[quote=Dizzy Mays]

Yea Yu Already Kno Who It Is
Mays Throwin Verses Like Hollowtips
Duck & Move Bitch Before You Get Hit
Mays With Barley Legal Thats 2 Nine's Bitch
And I Got That Nina Thats My Side Bitch
Imma Set Her Out She Gon Buss Watch This
POW!
Ol Skool Shit How You Like Me Now
This Aint P.E I Dont Even Play Around
Pop Up On Da Block And Left Errbody Layin Down
Gun Sounds Got Errbody Quiet Now
New Glock And Im Just Anxious To Try it Out
Ace Hood Shit Gutta Now Bitch Ruthless To The Core
Verses Been 1Hundred And Aint Neva Had An Underscore

Why Do You Capitalize Every Word? It Makes No Sense...

Time to write 10 bars about this boy Dizzy
I ain't got much time, so I better get busy
Check it, pussy ass bitch you ain't never held a gun
You're a pussy, you hear gun shots and you run
Nothing personal, I'm just killing you for fun
Never dissed you, so I had to write one
Faggot bitch, you ain't never had a Mack
But that's what you call your boyfriend when he hits you from the back.
I'm gonna stop, you can't fuck with Artille
I can't do 16, cause that would be overkill

That one was basic, but oh well...

Dont Know Why I Do It Habit I Guess,Use To Be Something I'd Have To Do For A Punishment Back In Elementary School Guess I Just Got Use To It

HaHa I laugh Cuz That Was A Joke
No Wait Shit Was Trash No Wait It Was Dope
On A Opposite Day Where Everything Is Backwards
So For This Verse You Straigt And Yea Im Gay[Sarcasm]
Everything That You Say Imma Say In My Way
Watch Mays Take Your Little Verse And Reverse Everything You Say
In A Big Way You Say Time To Get Bizzy Not For Dizzy
Cuz Im Havin To Much Fun Makin This Look Easy
Lets See Gettin Every Bitch Wit A Ass That I See
Imma Pussy??
Well Im Hittin Every Shot Im Feelin Kinda Paul Pierc-Y
Very Personal And Im Commin Back For The Victory
Diss Me Again And Youll Be Gone With The Wind
I Aint Say Shit Bout A Mack And I Dont Even Like Men
Only Fuck With Bitches With Bitches As Bestfriends
You Just Fuck With Men But On Here You Pretend
And You Mad Cuz He Called You Mays By Mistake Man
Im Gonna Stop Here But Im Really Just Beginnin
You Cant Beat Mays In Real Life So Just Have Fun Pretendin

[/quote:2rge88cm]
Oh I see...

I'm just gonna say it, YOU FUCKIN SUCK!!!
Sorry to make you cry, but I don't give a fuck
You call yourself gay, thats what you rapped
No sarcasm, you need to be slapped
You called yourself homo like Bruno
You're a faggot ass bitch, I know you know
Haha, Dizzy Mays!!!
He stays with the gays
Steady suckin on D.I.C.K.
Bitch you take it in every hole all day
And I really hope that was a beginning, you should have came harder
I killed you and didn't even try, like drowning in shallow water.
Your rhymes are more basic than Dr. Suess
Just end it... I win, You lose!

[Def Kool]

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I Spit Crack Cocaine, You Get An Overdose Like Kurt Cobain
You Die On A Toilet Seat Like The King Of Rock
I Hurt You To The Bottom, It's The Rock
The Ninja Hopping Like A Kangaroo New AkA Raisu
Some Rose So I Rise Too
I Play On Knox Xbox
A Song From Me Is Like A Cock Delivery At The Docks
Without Batman And Robin
I'm Lethal Contrary of Cy·An·Met·He·Mo·Glo·Bin
I Put You In A Container, Get You Back To Ukrainia

Feedback
it's really from the superdome

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

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Like Why Do You Even Try Stop It You Cant Beat I
Me Or Myself Lyrically Your Blind You Cant See Me
No Homo But You Still Wanna Be With Me
Writing All These Mean Things
Why Dont You Just Leave Me...Alone
I Am Grown Im Not A Homo And I Dont Play With Kids
I Am Done With Artile Someone Else Finish With This.....