Off the Dome-Contest

[Artille]

Re: Of The Dome-Contest

this turned out to be a good thread

Its more of an off-topic rap thread lol. There are not that many raps, and way more arguments.

[JrockHQ]

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[quote=Artille]

My material is so outta this world they say i steal
i got robots from mars rapping to my shit saying it's ill
im dancing with the devil, only b/c my bars are made out of hot stile
watch the lyrical sniper, it's deadly and I'm aim to kill
trillphill wanna talk shit and bring me down
im lifting HQ back up with my feet on the ground
it's time for a new movement and different approach
thats why im copping rebirth December 21st
no later or ur catch a ride with 50 cent in a flopped hearse
Some may call me rock b/c my words are powerful and off the top
others call me j b/c i stay blazed in my own world ready to amaze
but those who call me cock are haters and only here to jock

Any feedback would be appreciated.

lol my bad bro I got you wih the feedback. I'm gonna come out and say it, I'm glad you aren't stealing lyrics anymore. You have enough talent right here.

Feedback: Try to work on your rhyming a little bit more (i.e. approach and 21st don't rhyme. Unless you say it differently). I was diggin the 50 line, pretty funny. Overall it was straight, it had some moments when I was like "ummm what?" but there were also moments when i was like "Ayy (oj voice) that was cool"

Ok it's Mo' Rich
Stepped off wit yo bitch
Take her around the corner and hit her wit this Mo' Dick
Yea I gotta be the best
I put all other rappers to rest
And in a rap battle I still come out beating on my chest
Cuz I'm in it to win it
I jus practice neva quit it
And your girl like Shawty Lo, she yell "Get Get Get It!!!"

-Mo' Rich

As for you. The last line was said in a song before, but I can't remember the track right now. I'm pretty sure Jae Millz said that. When you said you come out beating on your chest, I was really hoping you would follow it up with something like "CUZ IM A BEAST" or something to tag along with it ya know. Just simple advice.[/quote:4hl853xf]

lol thank for the feedback

[Enigma]

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[quote=Lyrical JRock][quote=Artille]

My material is so outta this world they say i steal
i got robots from mars rapping to my shit saying it's ill
im dancing with the devil, only b/c my bars are made out of hot stile
watch the lyrical sniper, it's deadly and I'm aim to kill
trillphill wanna talk shit and bring me down
im lifting HQ back up with my feet on the ground
it's time for a new movement and different approach
thats why im copping rebirth December 21st
no later or ur catch a ride with 50 cent in a flopped hearse
Some may call me rock b/c my words are powerful and off the top
others call me j b/c i stay blazed in my own world ready to amaze
but those who call me cock are haters and only here to jock

Any feedback would be appreciated.

lol my bad bro I got you wih the feedback. I'm gonna come out and say it, I'm glad you aren't stealing lyrics anymore. You have enough talent right here.

Feedback: Try to work on your rhyming a little bit more (i.e. approach and 21st don't rhyme. Unless you say it differently). I was diggin the 50 line, pretty funny. Overall it was straight, it had some moments when I was like "ummm what?" but there were also moments when i was like "Ayy (oj voice) that was cool"

Ok it's Mo' Rich
Stepped off wit yo bitch
Take her around the corner and hit her wit this Mo' Dick
Yea I gotta be the best
I put all other rappers to rest
And in a rap battle I still come out beating on my chest
Cuz I'm in it to win it
I jus practice neva quit it
And your girl like Shawty Lo, she yell "Get Get Get It!!!"

-Mo' Rich

As for you. The last line was said in a song before, but I can't remember the track right now. I'm pretty sure Jae Millz said that. When you said you come out beating on your chest, I was really hoping you would follow it up with something like "CUZ IM A BEAST" or something to tag along with it ya know. Just simple advice.[/quote:2j1ms308]

lol thank for the feedback[/quote:2j1ms308]

Now go tell the guy who's lyrics you stole this advice.

[Def Kool]

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Twist yours was straight

Thx Dude

[YoungFire420]

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Let me start by saying, these dudes aint brave
On HQ, we got dudes hiding in vans and in caves
And theres dudes with some ugly ass girlfriends
Try me in a battle and have your mind doing whirlspins
And we got others hatin' on the crew, bitch just let us be
You're gunna pay for the hatin, just remember in America health care aint free

DAMN

[eyecandii]

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First time in The Studio but im bout to kill it
Eatin all u otha niggaz, fry u like a skillet
Harder than these other hoes, baddest bitch flowin
U niggaz need mapquest, U dont know where Im goin
U dont know where I been and I dont know what Im sayin
But this shit is off the dome so Im really jus playin
But let me be real, cuz I know Im neva fakin
U think u hard nigga, well Im sorry ur mistaken
Dis da realest shit you readin and I spit it oh so sexy
Make ya girlfriend wanna text me, is this getting too perplexing?
Its Eye Candii Bitch, not a harujuku barbie
Not a diss to Nicki but that swag is really sorry
Fuck a 5 star chick, Im the queen of my city
Reppin Memphis to the fullest, On my throne sittin pretty
Stay higher den a muthafucka, Rollin up my trees
U think u on my level, think again, BITCH PLEASE!

[YoungFire420]

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That went hard girl!!!

[eyecandii]

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That went hard girl!!!

I really want anotha female to rap on here but I guess not all girls have that talent. I tear bitches apart freestylin. But I can tear some niggaz apart too

[YoungFire420]

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That went hard girl!!!

I really want anotha female to rap on here but I guess not all girls have that talent. I tear bitches apart freestylin. But I can tear some niggaz apart too

Theres like 1 or 2 other girls that do raps on here, but its only occasionally...

[IAmJay]

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Let me start by saying, these dudes aint brave
On HQ, we got dudes hiding in vans and in caves
And theres dudes with some ugly ass girlfriends
Try me in a battle and have your mind doing whirlspins
And we got others hatin' on the crew, bitch just let us be
You're gunna pay for the hatin, just remember in America health care aint free

DAMN

As for hating on crews, that's the other way around. And for the ugly girlfriend part, smh.

[YoungFire420]

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Let me start by saying, these dudes aint brave
On HQ, we got dudes hiding in vans and in caves
And theres dudes with some ugly ass girlfriends
Try me in a battle and have your mind doing whirlspins
And we got others hatin' on the crew, bitch just let us be
You're gunna pay for the hatin, just remember in America health care aint free

DAMN

As for hating on crews, that's the other way around. And for the ugly girlfriend part, smh.

Shut the fuck up Pablo Jr bitch. Did i ask for your feedback? Get off my nuts homo.

[IAmJay]

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Let me start by saying, these dudes aint brave
On HQ, we got dudes hiding in vans and in caves
And theres dudes with some ugly ass girlfriends
Try me in a battle and have your mind doing whirlspins
And we got others hatin' on the crew, bitch just let us be
You're gunna pay for the hatin, just remember in America health care aint free

DAMN

As for hating on crews, that's the other way around. And for the ugly girlfriend part, smh.

Shut the fuck up Pablo Jr bitch. Did i ask for your feedback? Get off my nuts homo.

Don't you love feedback? Well I'm giving you feedback.