Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Feb. 20]

[Artille]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

[quote=Dizzy Mays]

i aint gonna hate on dizzy, your shits raw.
but artille, come on mayne if you want my respect drop a decent audio track, or post better lyrics.

Again please read my material and give constructive criticism. Don't tell me it's whack and then end your post. Dizzy hasn't released an audio track either so I'm not sure where you are going with that.

EDIT: Wanted to point out that I beat Dizzy in a written battle about a month ago. Not trying to dis you Dizzy, just trying to make a point. Your material has improved since then. Still can't stand the Capital Letters All Of The Time Though. It Frustrates Me Also, YMC, I'm pretty sure you voted for me in the written battle, not definite, but it's a possibility.

No Offense Takin..Yea You Beat Me Better Man Won(yea ymc did vote for you)

But yea now to do wat i cam here for to post this hottness you inspired i wrote it after reading yours.....

Swagger So Catastrophic You Need A Telescope To Watch It
O So Futuristic If You Dont Like Me Den Go Past It
Killin These Niggaz Someone Please Go Get The Caskets
Hot Sixteen Now You Really Underground Bitch
Lyrical Homicide The Verses Get Away With Murder
Dee Mays Shawty The Loudest Nigga You Neva Heard Of?
That Dont Sound Right Let Me Get On The Left Of Ya
See Me Im Kinda Wreckless So You Other Dudes Be Careful Bruh
Mays Send Slugs And I Aint Talkin Escargot
Talkin Bout These Bullets Commin From The Semi-Auto
Matic I Cause Static Like A TV With No Cable
Polo Horses Goin Wild Man I Think I Need A Stable
Bitches Mad At Mays They Want My Dick But I Aint Able
I Am Married To The Music And My Lyrics Is My Main Ho

FEEDBACK!

Probably should have posted this verse in your thread, but since I inspired it here's my feedback.

I liked it overall, but some parts kind of slipped. The line that stood out the most was

"Mays send slugs and I ain't talkin escargot /// Talkin bout these bullets coming from the semi-auto"
This just proves to me that you're getting much better. Kind of relates to something I said to YNR yesterday....

"40 rounds of slug ammo in your chest /// Hit your respiratory system and leave you with no breath"

Where Does It Slipp At???[/quote:2ajj5sqw]
Not really a slip, but some didn't rhyme right. Probably just the way I read it or the way you say it. Like murda and hear of.... I can see how you would say it in my head, but looks weird when written down.

EDIT: Enigma I was just thinking that before I read your post.

[ItzTheRemixShawty!]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

i aint gonna hate on dizzy, your shits raw.
but artille, come on mayne if you want my respect drop a decent audio track, or post better lyrics.

Again please read my material and give constructive criticism. Don't tell me it's whack and then end your post. Dizzy hasn't released an audio track either so I'm not sure where you are going with that.

EDIT: Wanted to point out that I beat Dizzy in a written battle about a month ago. Not trying to dis you Dizzy, just trying to make a point. Your material has improved since then. Still can't stand the Capital Letters All Of The Time Though. It Frustrates Me Also, YMC, I'm pretty sure you voted for me in the written battle, not definite, but it's a possibility.

No Offense Takin..Yea You Beat Me Better Man Won(yea ymc did vote for you)

But yea now to do wat i cam here for to post this hottness you inspired i wrote it after reading yours.....

Swagger So Catastrophic You Need A Telescope To Watch It
O So Futuristic If You Dont Like Me Den Go Past It
Killin These Niggaz Someone Please Go Get The Caskets
Hot Sixteen Now You Really Underground Bitch
Lyrical Homicide The Verses Get Away With Murder
Dee Mays Shawty The Loudest Nigga You Neva Heard Of?
That Dont Sound Right Let Me Get On The Left Of Ya
See Me Im Kinda Wreckless So You Other Dudes Be Careful Bruh
Mays Send Slugs And I Aint Talkin Escargot
Talkin Bout These Bullets Commin From The Semi-Auto
Matic I Cause Static Like A TV With No Cable
Polo Horses Goin Wild Man I Think I Need A Stable
Bitches Mad At Mays They Want My Dick But I Aint Able
I Am Married To The Music And My Lyrics Is My Main Ho

FEEDBACK!

Just curious, the first line can you explain your reasoning behind it. I know of one possible way that would make sense, but I want to hear yours, so I'll give my question - If you're flow's catastrophic, why would you need a telescope to see it? Wouldn't that mean it would be small since you need a zoomed in view of it?

Adj. 1. catastrophic - extremely harmful; bringing physical or financial ruin
Dont Know Bout You But If Something extremely Harmful Im Not Gonna Stand right in front Of it im Sayin Get A Telescope To Watch

[Artille]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

lol word

Not trying to be rude. This is my thread, kind of want to get back on topic. Enigma do you have any feedback.

[YoungMoneyEnt]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

[Safe_Kid]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

[Artille]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

Thanks for that.

Suicide Squad audio dis coming soon... release date yet to be set.

[JrockHQ]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

Thanks for that.

Suicide Squad audio dis coming soon... release date yet to be set.

Damn Suicide Squad is not getting love lately lol, i dropped a diss record, YNR dropped a diss record, your about to, jay is about to, there getting dissed in 16 bars like every other day. the admins are going in on them. looll

[YoungFire420]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

[quote=Lyrical JRock]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

Thanks for that.

Suicide Squad audio dis coming soon... release date yet to be set.

Damn Suicide Squad is not getting love lately lol, i dropped a diss record, YNR dropped a diss record, your about to, jay is about to, there getting dissed in 16 bars like every other day. the admins are going in on them. looll[/quote:1bl03i93]

Okay Mr Beaner Boy. Your "diss" wasnt even a "diss". Its stole, the original person was disssing someone else. So that doesnt count. YNR's, from only dickriders commenting it. I didnt even listen. YNR used to be a good rapper, now its just the same fucking thing on every song. Artille and Jay, HA thats nothing to be worried of. And the admins are going in on us? Wtf are you talking about? God beaners need to die.

[Artille]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

[quote=skimdudee420]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

Thanks for that.

Suicide Squad audio dis coming soon... release date yet to be set.

Damn Suicide Squad is not getting love lately lol, i dropped a diss record, YNR dropped a diss record, your about to, jay is about to, there getting dissed in 16 bars like every other day. the admins are going in on them. looll

Okay Mr Beaner Boy. Your "diss" wasnt even a "diss". Its stole, the original person was disssing someone else. So that doesnt count. YNR's, from only dickriders commenting it. I didnt even listen. YNR used to be a good rapper, now its just the same fucking thing on every song. Artille and Jay, HA thats nothing to be worried of. And the admins are going in on us? Wtf are you talking about? God beaners need to die.[/quote:2bc2djgu]
Be worried because I'm going to bring that fire no doubt. The thing is though, regardless if I murder you guys or not, I will still get hated on being called an a garbage rapper. We will see...

[Redd Herring]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

[quote=Artille]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

Thanks for that.

Suicide Squad audio dis coming soon... release date yet to be set.

Damn Suicide Squad is not getting love lately lol, i dropped a diss record, YNR dropped a diss record, your about to, jay is about to, there getting dissed in 16 bars like every other day. the admins are going in on them. looll

Okay Mr Beaner Boy. Your "diss" wasnt even a "diss". Its stole, the original person was disssing someone else. So that doesnt count. YNR's, from only dickriders commenting it. I didnt even listen. YNR used to be a good rapper, now its just the same fucking thing on every song. Artille and Jay, HA thats nothing to be worried of. And the admins are going in on us? Wtf are you talking about? God beaners need to die.

Be worried because I'm going to bring that fire no doubt. The thing is though, regardless if I murder you guys or not, I will still get hated on being called an a garbage rapper. We will see...[/quote:15bg6gv9]


Of course because if we say we like music nowadayz were dick riders haha idk i've always tried to be as honest as i could without hurting any feelings on ppls tracks n they still wanna get mad and all nasty n throw insults back so the whole feedback shit aint for me unless i have somethin goood to say from now on no matter how it is. If i like it ill let you know if i dont i jus wont post on it cuz ppl cant take critisizm in any type of form these days. Lookin forward to the track though.

[Safe_Kid]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

[quote=BranD NewZZ][quote=Artille]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

Thanks for that.

Suicide Squad audio dis coming soon... release date yet to be set.

Damn Suicide Squad is not getting love lately lol, i dropped a diss record, YNR dropped a diss record, your about to, jay is about to, there getting dissed in 16 bars like every other day. the admins are going in on them. looll

Okay Mr Beaner Boy. Your "diss" wasnt even a "diss". Its stole, the original person was disssing someone else. So that doesnt count. YNR's, from only dickriders commenting it. I didnt even listen. YNR used to be a good rapper, now its just the same fucking thing on every song. Artille and Jay, HA thats nothing to be worried of. And the admins are going in on us? Wtf are you talking about? God beaners need to die.

Be worried because I'm going to bring that fire no doubt. The thing is though, regardless if I murder you guys or not, I will still get hated on being called an a garbage rapper. We will see...[/quote:2f1sat3z]


Of course because if we say we like music nowadayz were dick riders haha idk i've always tried to be as honest as i could without hurting any feelings on ppls tracks n they still wanna get mad and all nasty n throw insults back so the whole feedback shit aint for me unless i have somethin goood to say from now on no matter how it is. If i like it ill let you know if i dont i jus wont post on it cuz ppl cant take critisizm in any type of form these days. Lookin forward to the track though.[/quote:2f1sat3z]

Ayo im dickriding because i agree with this post right?

YNR hasn't changed, hes still good. But ever since he dropped a SS diss hes "Saying the same things"?

[Redd Herring]

Re: Artille Official Thread [Written Only] [Updated Dec. 9]

[quote=Safe_Kid][quote="BranD NewZZ":38lueu0x][quote=Artille]

No point in you having a thread.
You have no music.

The Studio

Post all your raps, poems, lyrics, beats and mixtapes in here! Also discuss about making music and give feedback to others.

Sure it does.

Thanks for that.

Suicide Squad audio dis coming soon... release date yet to be set.

Damn Suicide Squad is not getting love lately lol, i dropped a diss record, YNR dropped a diss record, your about to, jay is about to, there getting dissed in 16 bars like every other day. the admins are going in on them. looll

Okay Mr Beaner Boy. Your "diss" wasnt even a "diss". Its stole, the original person was disssing someone else. So that doesnt count. YNR's, from only dickriders commenting it. I didnt even listen. YNR used to be a good rapper, now its just the same fucking thing on every song. Artille and Jay, HA thats nothing to be worried of. And the admins are going in on us? Wtf are you talking about? God beaners need to die.

Be worried because I'm going to bring that fire no doubt. The thing is though, regardless if I murder you guys or not, I will still get hated on being called an a garbage rapper. We will see...[/quote:38lueu0x]


Of course because if we say we like music nowadayz were dick riders haha idk i've always tried to be as honest as i could without hurting any feelings on ppls tracks n they still wanna get mad and all nasty n throw insults back so the whole feedback shit aint for me unless i have somethin goood to say from now on no matter how it is. If i like it ill let you know if i dont i jus wont post on it cuz ppl cant take critisizm in any type of form these days. Lookin forward to the track though.[/quote:38lueu0x]

Ayo im dickriding because i agree with this post right?

YNR hasn't changed, hes still good. But ever since he dropped a SS diss hes "Saying the same things"?[/quote:38lueu0x]



right! haha there jus hatin dog cuz SS really the ones who changed. went from bein "coolish" dudes to some flaming faggots forreal. makes me laugh to tears when i see shit like this tbh man cuz imagin if they were big as shit n they were gettin dissed by someone like game or 50 how they would act lol. it would ruin there careers to the end no doubt becuz they would either jus respond with racist remarks, say the music isnt theres n that wasnt them on a track or they would have some other type of down falling issue they would try n use as n excuse like... I recorded my music with no efforts haha. I used to really fuck wit them dudes til YME came up out the closet