Jrock23 vs TrillPhill [OVER]

[trillphill]

Re: Jrock23 vs TrillPhill [READ & VOTE NOW]

Round 2 Jrock23 Vs trillphill

Im ridiculous, hard to discuss
so dirty Mr. clean cant even spit shine this rust
Put the pistol to your brain, squeeze the trigga
White kid from Houston, TX acting like SHHhhhhh (nigga)
Back to my message, back in session
outlining trill's body in white chalk is todays class lesson
put the chalk to trill's dome and begin to question
if the red ploom of smoke is a good investment
trillphill you tongue twisted, you musta missed it
the thesaurus is online if you wanna visit it
YOu talk like your from the Projects
but I bet your a high tech white kid doing projects for college
Im son of sam delirious, tear you apart like opponents vs. serius
Because Im so serious, leaving people curious
as to what made this cat so furious
Ill be honest it starts in my mental
Then it goes down synapses’ and then through my dentals
Then Ill rip a track, lay heat on an instrumental
Making trillphill second guess his hip hop credentials
Listen I know you’re good at what you do
You spit till ya lungs are blue through and through
But you’re going against a seasoned pro, with a flow
that contains katrina force winds that blow
You talk slow about Brooklyn’s white snow
Ill talk about fully converted auto AK’s that glow
so lets prep your vien, begin the campaign
to inject real lyrics as raw cocaine
cause Im leavin trill's brain full of pain
drowning him with hallucinations and mental strains
It is not luck my skill is unreal, I contain mass appeal,
That will leave your wounds from this battle hard to heal
Cuz "You can be alot better" this site says
I know that comment ruined your night going straight to ya head
So you switched flow, with a finer thread
But to think you can win against me you must be mad misled
Because I can go for days, spitting under sun rays on Sunday
setting paper ablaze with my pen just to amaze
And that is the difference between me and a fake
It’s natural, if I don’t write my hand begins to shake
Vowels that tremor, making your body quake
Vocal going in your ears trill, making your brain ache
I guess you can say I’m a walking time bomb
Approaching you with a pen as a detonator in my palm.
And the explosion will resonate and employ white noise that annoys and destroys
So trillphill its time to separate the men from the boys..

Please don't vote on who you like best as a person but on who has the better lyrics, trillphill you have 24 hrs to reply back

Damn, I'm not sure of the shit you have up your sleeve but I noticed you edited your thread around 10pm my time, just quoting to see if you'll change anything anymore

[JrockHQ]

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Damn, I'm not sure of the shit you have up your sleeve but I noticed you edited your thread around 10pm my time, just quoting to see if you'll change anything anymore

Lol wasn't it you that told me to edit the name of the thread to add read & vote now and change the caps of ur first and last name? don't be trying to play me like im changing my stuff up

[trillphill]

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Damn, I'm not sure of the shit you have up your sleeve but I noticed you edited your thread around 10pm my time, just quoting to see if you'll change anything anymore

Lol wasn't it you that told me to edit the name of the thread to add read & vote now and change the caps of ur first and last name? don't be trying to play me like im changing my stuff up

Wow, I really forgot about that. This will probably be the only time I ever say I was at fault in a conversation with you.
I will keep it quoted anyways, but you were right I forgot about that, my bad.

[Patriarch]

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I refuse to be restricted by some format. Mostly because I'm a dick.

Jrock

White kid from Houston, TX acting like SHHhhhhh (nigga)

As I saw it, this was the best diss in your set, and I don't even know if it's true.
It's too bad that you then treaded on the same ground:

but I bet your a high tech white kid doing projects for college

trillphill you tongue twisted, you musta missed it
the thesaurus is online if you wanna visit it
YOu talk like your from the Projects
but I bet your a high tech white kid doing projects for college

It’s natural, if I don’t write my hand begins to shake
Vowels that tremor, making your body quake

These don't work for me. You talk about thesauruses and then accuse him of being some college kid? Ignoring that fact that he's 16, you're creating a contradictory juxtaposition of stupid here. You're using your shaking to signify that you're a good rapper, but then you say that he starts shaking in the next line. See what I'm getting at?

Ill be honest it starts in my mental
Then it goes down synapses’ and then through my dentals
Then Ill rip a track, lay heat on an instrumental

As obvious as it is that this part is pure filler, I liked it.

Because I can go for days, spitting under sun rays on Sunday

I liked this too. Days, sun rays, Sunday - good.

And the explosion will resonate and employ white noise that annoys and destroys
So trillphill its time to separate the men from the boys..

Nice, nice...it's over? What? Abrupt ending man. Perhaps your malformed ellipsis symbolizes that.

TrillPhill
I took into account the fact that Trill went second (and thus had a chance to respond to some of the stuff said).

If acting like a nigga is bein you that's not what I'm about.
Cus real niggas can rap and that's not what YOU'RE about.

I like how these two lines serve to both exonerate you and diss him. They aren't particularly complex, but they get the job done.

You're such a failure I should sue the retards at Trojan.

I have to admit, this line actually made me laugh out loud. That hasn't happened before with something on here.

Nigga couldn't even win this rap battle if he re-wrote his lyrics.
Oh wait he previously did and only won due to Patriarch.

HOW DARE YOU MENTION ME.
Seriously though, that diss would have been way better if it was left subtle.

And no your lines weren't sick, they were pathetic.

Cus you're pathetic..while I give voters hand erections.

This may be pithy, but when you used "pathetic" again all I could think was that it would have been much, much better if you had chosen a different word.

Cus I've faced one person better than you..and he No-showed.
I'd thought you'd be decent at rappin being from New York.
Well after reading your shit I'd say find a New Sport.

Your hardest-hitting part in my opinion. Like the previous comment, though, you re-used MIE later:

We could get MIE to no-show and he'd still finish you off.

I just feel that when you reuse stuff like this, it really dilutes the power of your words.

You're in cohorts with all the retards on this site for Wayne.

Speaking from personal experience, I can tell you that saying things like this in a battle doesn't help you.

Victory for me is inevitable like death..I know you're hurt.
This win is for K3v0 cus to me beatin you has no worth.

This seemed like a more conclusive ending than Jrock's.









Both of you had poor flow. Jrock, I can't even figure yours out no matter how I look at it. It seems like you switch it up a few times, though. Trill, your lines are too long...again. This was a surprisingly dope battle (sort of what I expected from MIE vs. Trill). This could easily be the final. Overall, I give this to Trill. Jrock's set contained a lot of filler and his disses are pretty simple. Trill utilized actual situations on this site in his diss in order to launch raw personals at Jrock.

PLUS I JUST LIKE THAT ONE BETTER

[KrisJohnson]

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Ouch Patriarch, giving me love. This the final? When I face Trill I am going hard and will actually spend some time for the finals.

I am going Trill. Jrock went harder than I thought but Trill killed it.

[trillphill]

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meant to fix post

[trillphill]

Re: Jrock23 vs TrillPhill [READ & VOTE NOW]

I took into account the fact that Trill went second (and thus had a chance to respond to some of the stuff said).

You mean feeding off his verse; yes I'm a leech

And the re writting lyrics line when you say it should be left off, what do you mean? It was paired with the previous bar. :suprised:

EDIT* forgot to say thanks for constructive criticism and I lol'd at my computer about how saying the in cohorts line won't get me any help in this battle
and did no one like the Pam and Tommy line? shit's too deep for you i see how it is

[JrockHQ]

Re: Jrock23 vs TrillPhill [READ & VOTE NOW]

Both of you had poor flow. Jrock, I can't even figure yours out no matter how I look at it. It seems like you switch it up a few times, though. Trill, your lines are too long...again. This was a surprisingly dope battle (sort of what I expected from MIE vs. Trill). This could easily be the final. Overall, I give this to Trill. Jrock's set contained a lot of filler and his disses are pretty simple. Trill utilized actual situations on this site in his diss in order to launch raw personals at Jrock.

PLUS I JUST LIKE THAT ONE BETTER

So your saying i did't utilize actual situations on this site on the diss what about "acting like a White kid from Houston TX" Cuz "You can be alot better" this site says I know that comment ruined your night going straight to ya head So you switched flow, with a finer thread? i understand and respect your opinions and thoughts but i feel a tournament is more then about dissing your opponent and by you saying "Jrock, I can't even figure yours out no matter how I look at it" i was going at more as a story telling/metaphors punchline battle there. but hey thanks for the pointers

[MszYNR]

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Dammit Patriarch, you always say it all, giving no reason for anyone else to post.


Anyway, it seemed JRock was talking more about himself, than throwing disses.

personals: name
metaphors/similies: name
punchlines: name
consistency: name
flow: name
multies: name

Sorry I can't follow this, I don't know what any of this means.

[trillphill]

Re: Jrock23 vs TrillPhill [READ & VOTE NOW]

Both of you had poor flow. Jrock, I can't even figure yours out no matter how I look at it. It seems like you switch it up a few times, though. Trill, your lines are too long...again. This was a surprisingly dope battle (sort of what I expected from MIE vs. Trill). This could easily be the final. Overall, I give this to Trill. Jrock's set contained a lot of filler and his disses are pretty simple. Trill utilized actual situations on this site in his diss in order to launch raw personals at Jrock.

PLUS I JUST LIKE THAT ONE BETTER

So your saying i did't utilize actual situations on this site on the diss what about "acting like a White kid from Houston TX" Cuz "You can be alot better" this site says I know that comment ruined your night going straight to ya head So you switched flow, with a finer thread? i understand and respect your opinions and thoughts but i feel a tournament is more then about dissing your opponent and by you saying "Jrock, I can't even figure yours out no matter how I look at it" i was going at more as a story telling/metaphors punchline battle there. but hey that's for the pointers

Sorry, I'm attempting to keep up with this thread.
What The Hell do you think a DISS IS ABOUT? To throw punches at your opponent, not tell DR. Suess stories and all that jazz. Yes, I'm white to point that out.

@Msz

what I posted was just a guideline. For example who's verse had more and better punches?: than you put the name of whoever.

It seems though that the form doesn't go well with some people (ahem), so just read them both and say what you like about whose and why there's was good or better in comparison to the others.
And for the Noobs (yes I said that) a diss battle is about DISSING the other person, not talking about his momma's cousin the whole time.

[JrockHQ]

Re: Jrock23 vs TrillPhill [READ & VOTE NOW]

So how many votes or hours until this voting call is over?

[trillphill]

Re: Jrock23 vs TrillPhill [READ & VOTE NOW]

So how many votes or hours until this voting call is over?

Give it till tomorrow night or the next day depending on how many of the normal users for The Studio want to vote.