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  • I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

    Moments

    Intro
    Pop a bar I'm heavy
    I'm sinkin in the couch
    I been sipping one too many
    Backstrokes on a cloud
    I don't think that y'all are ready
    But I know that you aroused
    Ima paint a picture vivid
    Show you what we all about
    Look

    --ain't not urkles lurkin in my inner circle
    While we stuntin with stuffed blunts
    N puffin till we dumbstruck
    yeah
    --n ima blow up i got dumb luck
    And Mama read my palm n said u good ya lines are long as fuck

    --clap for me motherfucker clap for me
    I don't bang around with guns backpack only strap on me
    ---The Bottom line I rock a tassel with my cap homie
    ---I'm stating facts and we talkin brass tacks homie
    shit
    Remember when ya biggest problem was a math quiz?
    --Or that fucking bully's head you shoulda bashed in
    --ridin dirty every fuckin time. Classic
    ---red and blue lights we cool right? I stashed it

    --Quarter ounce of that purple I can't pronounce
    Spitting lyrical slugs with 32 up in the round boy
    Yeah
    I been plotting been planning
    --It's just a game of thrones I'm headed for kings landing

    --I hear em sayin dam
    I'm hope he makes it
    but don't even have the time to say happy belated
    Haha
    ---You a joke with that fake smile
    --- im more consistent than the muthafuckin bassline

    I won't waste another fuckin line on your fake ass
    ---just know the only thing to fail is my break pads
    cuz Ima never stop
    Eating rappers give me gas man
    --Ya can't see me yeah thats me spittin flash bangs

    Still saying Damn "I aint know you rap"
    --Cuz I don't boast n brag about my swag is u stupid dummy?
    I just keep my eyes wide open
    --cuz the LIGHTbulb over my head still ain't broken

    But I don't rap well
    Ha
    --I try to tell em
    I just Sneak up on the beat n double tap to the cerebellum
    yeah
    Just the introduction Lil weed lotta liquor spilling truth over smooth percussions




    this is shit ive given feedback on:
    http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...mr-ham-me.html
    http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...verse-j-p.html
    Last edited by Dukez; 11-13-2011, 01:07 PM.

  • #2
    Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

    37 views and no replies? come on fellas

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    • #3
      Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

      Welcome back bro, sorry, but don't feel like readin' atm.


      Too bust bangin' Stunna!!

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      • #4
        Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

        YOU KILLED IT!! very dope flow, majority of what I read was on point. i give it a 9, but really this one of the best i i done seen so far lol

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        • #5
          Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

          10 mai booi.

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          • #6
            Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

            thanks guys, im working on my first mixtape over the next few months.... just wanted to see if everyone else thought it was dope. this is going to be the intro.
            Last edited by Dukez; 11-19-2011, 08:41 PM.

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            • #7
              Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

              "And Mama read my palm n said u good ya lines are long as fuck" I laughed real bad at that one hahaha, you killed it homie, props.
              would you check my shit?
              http://www.lilwaynehq.com/forums/wri...-feedback.html
              Btw if that's gon be the intro I really wanna see the entire mixtape, it's gonna be bananas!

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              • #8
                Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

                Sure I'll upload it on this website

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                • #9
                  Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

                  you know i love thisss

                  nahh but forreal good shit make sure to post that mixtape

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                  • #10
                    Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

                    No doubt homie.
                    Last edited by Dukez; 12-21-2011, 06:57 PM.

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                    • #11
                      Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

                      plz comment some more !!

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                      • #12
                        Re: I been away for a while but Im back. (DUKE - MOMENTS) Please rate 1-10 fuckaaz.

                        Is good for about a third of a single verse, need about fifteen times more words and a hook. Unless you just talk slow or something.

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